Bitter Release

Adult
Rated 3.33/5 based on 4 reviews
A young soldier finds himself trapped in a cave in with only a case of absinthe and his memories to keep him company. Will he escape or find his only release in the embrace of the green fairy?

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Words: 3,250
Language: English
ISBN: 9781452325316
About Scott Roche

I've been writing stories since I was a boy, but only recently have made inroads into becoming a published author.

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Review by: Arlene Radasky on March 28, 2011 : (no rating)
There are other critiques for Scott's stories, and some say he needs to add more to the story. He could, but this is approx 3000 words, the length some stories need to be for certain situations. It has a good beginning, middle and solving the problem ending. The MC was passive, he had just lived through everyone around him dying. He was tired and just wanted a place to sleep safely. There he found solace and release in drink. I liked it!
(reviewed the day of purchase)

Review by: Arlene Radasky on March 28, 2011 :
We are taken to World War Two. We are in a gritty, stench of death filled trench with Will Thompson. All his friends, his mates, men he fought so long and valiantly with are dead around him. He is the last one. How does he rescue himself, how does he get out? Only the fairies know, the green fairy who awaits him.

I was transported to not only the trench through Scott's words, but also into Will's mind and his last thoughts of release.

Excellent short story.
(reviewed the day of purchase)

Review by: Rudy Melena on Feb. 08, 2011 :
This story feels like a draft that could use additional work. There is a scene where the main character has an internal dialogue while sleeping. The dream is much too realistic. Real dreams are fuzzy and obscure.

The main character is too passive for my taste. He easily resigns himself to his situation without a wild thought process taking place and without actions in an attempt to free himself.

At the end of the story, the bunker location and the dialogue don't feel European.

There's potential here for an engaging story. I need to feel the soldier's dispair.
(reviewed within a month of purchase)

Review by: R Orion D on March 30, 2010 :
It's tough giving a review on a short story without including any spoilers but I'll give it a shot.

This may seem contradictory but too much is going on in this story yet there isn't enough to the story either.

There. Done.

More?

Ok.

Reading the story you feel that it was written to be seen on the screen or TV rather than read. Paragraphs are short and don't seem connected with each other. More like a shoot list on a storyboard. They tell you what the director want to capture but don't give you, the reader the details to give it a body, form, substance.

A good example of this cut-scene aspect would be these two paragraphs (No spoiler here):

"Thompson struggled to answer. He wanted to warn him...Finally all was black.
When his eyes opened this time only the wet smells and drippings let him know..."

A simple and would have hooked the two nicely. But on the screen I can see that there would have been a cut between the two.

As a story it's a good one that could benefit a bit by more depth. More getting into the head of Will Thompson and his plight. It has a good ghost story ending that I can easily see myself sharing with friends late at night around a camp fire.

I'd say more but then I'd be spoiling it for other.
(reviewed the day of purchase)

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