Carniform

Rated 5.00/5 based on 1 reviews
Petrarch Davius is the young heir to a powerful family, thrown into a world of intrigue at the unexpected death of his father. As chaos threatens to enter the last protected city, Petrarch must race to solve a mystery deeper than the roots of the city itself. If he can’t find the answers he seeks, he risks failing not only his family, but all humanity. More
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Review by: Francis W. Porretto on March 02, 2012 :
This book is riddled with technical errors: grammar, spelling, punctuation, and format. Its style veers back and forth between adult-oriented and young-adult. There are problems in the early backstory-references, and even a touch of "deus ex machina" in the mix.

I really shouldn't love it as much as I did. But I do. I read it in one sitting, unable to look away even for lunch.

From an old, much-traveled writer to a new one: Get yourself a good, sharp-eyed editor! The story is terrific, the characterizations are gripping, and the setting is first-rate, but a profusion of low-level mistakes can undo all of that. Also and more important, a good editor can spot your stylistic wobbles and your plot deviances far better than you can. You have the storyteller's gift; a good editor will help you to bring it to maximum power.

It's rather a pity that Carniform isn't suited to a sequel; the city's future, and Petrarch's exploration of the wilds beyond, could be fascinating. However, this story has been properly tied off. I hope you'll proceed on to another.

4.5 stars for the technical errors, but otherwise, well done!
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