I write naughty stories.
on Aug. 10, 2014 :
Rushed, quick read. Nothing exciting or erotic here. Needs more editing. Pretty awful writing and dialogue. Luke's dialogue is the worst.
What is up with writing 'The cock'.... It would make more sense to write 'His cock'.
Could have been a decent story if the author made it a little longer with more of a build up and more description. A lot happens within an orgy and this could have been explored in a more erotic and descriptive way.
(review of free book)