Moving Mrs. Mitchell

Adult
Rated 4.67/5 based on 3 reviews
Mrs. Robin Mitchell couldn’t stand living another moment in her cheating husband’s place. She needed to get out, and get out as soon as possible. College guys Paul and Brandon were more than willing to help her move... into her house, into her new life, and into their arms.
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Price: Free! USD

Words: 5,320
Language: English
ISBN: 9781476131771
About Kenny Wright

Kenny Wright is just a guy who writes what he likes to read: steamy, explicit erotica that’s just crazy enough to be true. Husband to his beautiful wife, father to his rambunctious daughter, and food slave to his needy cat, he squeezes writing in when he probably should be sleeping. Kenny believes in a world where men read and appreciate erotica, and hopes to contribute to it word by word.

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Review by: Anthony Beal on July 29, 2012 :
Realistic characters navigating believable circumstances of the sort to which many readers should be able to relate (and in which many readers would probably love to find themselves) made this a joy to read. The story moves at a pace that allows for better character development than is typical of a lot of erotic short stories, and the sex scenes radiate levels of carnal heat that titillate until the last word.
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Review by: Naoko Smith on July 05, 2012 :
This is a hot story and well written.
I docked a star mainly because of the unsafe sex. It would have been so easy for Mrs Mitchell to be grateful to Paul for offering the condom and accept it- it was such a nice touch, so typical of his character. She might be safe but how does she know he is? (Forgive me, I am on a bit of a mission to make safe sex normal in erotica!)
In saying this, I am pointing to the good characterisation. They are believable and different people (in some of these kind of stories the two young guys are so similar - apart from some anatomical details in their pants, that you wonder if they were cloned). It's great that Paul and Brandon do sex differently and Robin enjoys both.
There are some typos still.
The main issue is that this is a story falling between two genres. It is mainly a piece of erotica - and very nice too. In fact I read it 3 times! and finally secreted it in an obscurely named folder on my hard drive, whereas normally I read stories once and move on. However there are hints at a fuller story, about the breakup of Robin Mitchell's marriage, her loss of self esteem. There is potential here to build a novella perhaps around the scene, where you develop Paul and Robin more fully as characters, maybe do some write up of things before the move and how Robin might feel after behaving in a way that was not how she was in her marriage but which the story hints is how she used to be as a younger woman.
If you are going to stick with erotica, you are probably better off cutting out the I-am-so-bitter-about-that-racoon-eyes stuff (there isn't much of it).
If you do develop the story, will you not harp on so much about how Robin has such a fit body for a 40 year old? Maybe you could just write that she is 41 and that she has a good body as if the two are not necessarily incompatible? Hell, I am nearly 50 and I am constantly having to kick back guys half my age who attempt to fall into my knickers, I'm sure it's not that unusual.
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Review by: The Woods Group Publishing on June 29, 2012 :
A very well written and enjoyable read. Well done.
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