Brent is a husband, father, teacher, writer, and sometimes artist living in Seoul Korea, originally from Detroit, Michigan. Brent reads Stephen King, Brandon Mull, Jim Butcher, and a hundred others. You should too.
Lately Brent's been all over the place: designing book covers both E and print, editing up books, and reviewing for AIA (awesome indies, look them up). It's an exciting time to be a writer.
*If you're like me and you don't like to be cheated, please don't use Authorhouse.com. In fact, since finding Smashwords I intend to republish 'Breaking Benjamin' in its entirety here soon enough, and I'm also looking for a print publisher, if you'd like to have one on an actual bookshelf.
Francis W. Porretto
on Jan. 10, 2013 :
Well, all right!
I was initially unsure of your intentions, given that the uber-premise of your series is a school like that run by “The Organization,” from the “Hitman” fantasy. Had you followed that track too closely, your story would have been mere fan-fiction even if it had never mentioned “The Organization” or #47. What you did instead is quite impressive, albeit not perfect:
-- Is Wally a 7th year or a 6th year student? You made him both.
-- No, you CAN’T “saw targets in half” with an assault rifle. Trust me; I happen to own a few.
-- There are a small number of grammatical and punctuation errors, but nothing to detract seriously from the tale.
A suggestion: The existence of an academy such as Clements implies other things that you never mention: customers for its “product;” alumni already at work at their specialties; a protective shroud over its operations enforced by some large, powerful entity, governmental or otherwise. Alluding to some of that – delicately; evocatively -- might make an already entertaining story even better.
Yes, it’s grim. Yes, it has elements that require “sending the kids out of the room.” But all the same, it’s quite impressive.
(review of free book)