Come Find Me

Rated 4.00/5 based on 5 reviews
Jennifer's sister, Rachel, has inherited their Aunt's house. Jennifer hates the house, she's convinced it's haunted, but Rachel thinks differently. Rachel doesn't live in fear of things in shadows like her sister does and decides to move into the house... and never comes back. Jennifer, worried about her sister, goes looking for her at the house. Will she come back?
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Price: Free! USD

Words: 3,220
Language: English
ISBN: 9781301425822
About Krysteen Damon

I live in Washington with my daughter. I started writing when I was still in middle school and I as I grew, so did my writing and my passion for it.

To be truthful, I'm not very good at talking about myself about anything. I am good at bragging about my daughter, rambling, and topic jumping. I did consider asking someone close to me to write this, but I always feel like that that's impersonal.

Most of my reading in my life has been romance. And all of my first attempts at writing a book have been romances. Ironically, I find writing romance is somewhat hard for me, and I find writing horror quite easy (most likely because I'm easily frightened). But both I will write!

Reviews

Review by: Adam Patterson on Nov. 10, 2013 :
A good short story. It is not easy writing short stories with an effective ending, but Krysteen Damon managed to get a supernatural twist in that appears to have many interpretations?
I hope she continues with her work
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Review by: David Blake on May 30, 2013 : (no rating)
In response to Michael Carter's comments about me below... I'll hold my hands up and admit everything :-)

Yes, I probably seem overly critical a lot of the time, but in mitigation I'll never just say a story is bad, I'll explain where I thought there were weaknesses, because basically I want to help writers out there to improve. Showering them with praise might encourage them, but it won't help them improve one bit! And, hey, at least I'm taking the trouble to read and review stories on this site, we're in a minority, sadly.

Michael is absolutely right though - you should never take any of my criticism to heart.

Incidentally, are you aware that there are more reviews of many Smashwords stories on the Barnes & Noble website? The reviews are much more, um, variable on there and some are far more blunt than anything I would say!
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Review by: Michael Carter on May 30, 2013 :
I've had this on my Kindle for ages, and only just got round to reading it. Krysteen Damon is a promising writer, and this isn't a bad little ghost story at all. The writing is good, if a little inconsistent, and I was confused on occasion as to who was speaking. I wasn't keen on the ending, but at least there was an ending, and generally, this is enjoyable and bodes well for the future.

I have to have a word on David Blake's review below; while he is generally correct in what he's saying, sometimes it comes across as a bit too harsh; I wouldn't take it all too much to heart. He's a tough reviewer and says as he finds, and in truth, he'll be totally honest about your story and can only help you improve it.

Krysteen, this story was ok, and I look forward to "The Intruder" or anything else you might put up here.
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Review by: David Blake on April 26, 2013 :
**Warning - this review contains mild spoilers**
This was an OK story, it kept my interest right to the end but the plot somehow seemed to lack logic and consistency, as if ideas had just been shoved into it whether they really fitted or not.
Thirteen people have apparently committed suicide in the house of a period of many years. There's no attempt to explain what started this cycle. The house is haunted, but is this as a result of the first suicide, or did the first person kill himself because of the ghost??
Mildred "...stopped seeing the rest of the family and whenever they did see her," - big contradiction there, and soon after we're also told that Mildred has them round for dinner.
The girls' father is mentioned in the past events as wanting to help Mildred, but he's not around in the present events. It seems ridiculous that Rachel would arrive to move into her new home all alone with no other family members to provide any assistance - particularly when they're concerned about the house! Is the father dead by this point, if not why isn't he helping his daughter? The whole issue of each girl having to enter the house alone (thus being vulnerable) seemed very contrived.

People are found dead in the house, with blood everywhere, and messages written in blood on the mirror - so does nobody tell the police? Would there not be an official inquest after a sudden death?

People have lived in the house for years, it's suggested, yet Rachel and Jennifer fall victim to it pretty much immediately. Seems a bit inconsistent.

And the ending - I won't spoil it here, but it made me groan because the idea's been used so many times before.

The writing was a bit clunky at times, with some errors (eg "right" instead of "write" in the very last sentence) but I did see genuine attempts to describe things, build atmosphere and add some personality to the characters, important things that some writers neglect in their hurry to tell a story. I can see a lot of potential and I hope Krysteen writes more.
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Review by: Jonathan Antony Strickland on April 07, 2013 :
This was a good little horror story with a nice twist for an ending. I did find some of the sentances a little long with parts of the action jumping a little from scene to scene, but this is a minor gripe.

As urban horror stories go this was still very enjoyable and well worth a read.
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