We are S.P. Wish, a novel writing duo comprising of twins S Wish and P Wish. Our novels are available on smashwords.com and our blog www.spwishworks.blogspot.com
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on Jan. 05, 2011 :
This book seems geared towards a very young audience- 2nd-3rd graders. As I started to read this, my immediate thought was that the author(s) were either not native English speakers, or were quite young. The writing is very reminiscent of the writing of a upper primary student, or perhaps a middle school student. It's missing the fluidity that comes with a more mature writing style. Although the characters are meant to be 6th graders, there is a distinct lack of slang and relaxed speech. There is an over use of the ellipse, and some issues with a changing point of view as well. It's told in first person, but switches randomly to third person whenever convenient, with no indication to the reader it's switching.
It's difficult to rate this. If this is a creation by young people, I want to give encouragement. This isn't a bad place to start, but the writing and concept formation still have a long way to go to achieve the polish that stories geared to this age group should have. If it is truly geared for the young adult/teen audience, it is a 1 star. If it is, instead, more geared towards second-third graders, it would earn closer to a 2. In any case, I hope the authors continue to work on adding voice into the story and creating realistic dialogue that helps to move the story along, as well as developing storylines that are more fluid in nature.
(review of free book)