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on Aug. 08, 2014 :
Enjoyable well written short story with a twist at the end. NOW WHAT HAPPENS! You set the stage for a nice series. We are waiting.
(review of free book)
on Feb. 18, 2011 :
I approached this book with the attitude of it is what it is, a short story. With this in mind I had the feeling that this story has more to it than what is presented. For a moment of escape into the fiction realm it is not a bad pick up but for those of us that get really deeply involved in a story it may not be for you. I did think that the writing flowed really well and keeps the reader involved and turning the page it is just the story leaves us wanting more than it should. I also think that if this is to be a series then my previous remarks may be premature but if not then the author may want to visit that idea.
(reviewed within a month of purchase)
on Feb. 02, 2011 :
For your first sci-fi bit, not a tad bad.
Really, it seemed less like a stand-alone short story and more of a little chunk of something larger.
I think it relied a little too heavily on generic sci-fi elements, and there wasn't really enough time to explore any of the characters past their general archetypes.
The resolution seemed rushed.
I ended up with a lot of questions about the setting, primarily about the places mentioned and the nature of the Arterians--past the like-us-but-blue feature. It was also clear by the end that the Balec artifact was important past its value and as a symbol of Vena and Dickson's falling out, but we never got to see why.
Despite all that, the conversations flowed very well.
The writing itself is fairly clever in places, and it kept me hooked until the very end.
The story, on the whole, was entertaining, and a good first step into the genre. Looking forward to future stories!
(reviewed within a week of purchase)