Moments

Rated 2.00/5 based on 2 reviews
Life is such a precious thing. When is enough, enough? How can a gesture so small, create seismic ripples in others lives? How will you be remembered?
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About Kyle Kennedy

Kyle Kennedy is a California native, yet refuses to say the word "dude." He's writing genre's include crime, noire, fantasy, comedy and short stories.

Reviews

Review by: Earleen Smith on March 02, 2011 :
I largely agree with Jon's review. The story is an interesting premise. Author might find a copyeditor and proofreader helpful.

I'm giving it three stars for the idea and the twist near the end.
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Review by: Jon Hartford on March 01, 2011 :
This short story appears to be an unedited first draft. It could be that English isn't the writer's primary language. In that case I respect their effort, and encourage them to continue learning, but the quality of this is still poor.

The case changes between past and present frequently and there are errors in spelling and grammar. Lots of punctuation is missing or misused. There are places where the author uses a word that sounds similar to what they intended, but means something completely different. Adverbs and passive voice are a problem.

The idea and theme of the work has potential and the story itself is good, though the way it's told could be more polished. If the author works hard on rewriting and editing this, it could be worth reading. But at its current state, I can't recommend it.
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