I'm Wenz - Wendy when I'm in trouble - and I've been writing since I could hold a pen. I like horror and fantasy and some sci fi. I try to write the stuff I like to read but if it feels right to write something a bit off-target then I do that. People seem to enjoy reading it and if you're one of them, please leave comments.
Francis W. Porretto
on June 23, 2014 :
This has color and drive, and the Marquee characters have genuine substance. However, protagonist Rose goes from being a complete enigma at the opening of the story to an almost-complete enigma at the end. We get very little explanation of her origins, her backstory history, her unique power and how she came by it, or the Circle's interest in her. Given that this is surely the opening segment of a continuing story, that's tolerable in expectation of the next segment, even if one might wish for more revelations in this novel.
But far worse for the reading experience, the book is riddled with errors of spelling and punctuation, plus a handful of formatting errors, that a proofreader would have caught and corrected. I stopped counting at fifty such errors. Given your obvious storytelling talent, Miss Maddocks, I'm astounded that you didn't have someone check your work. An indie who hopes to attract a sizable following can't afford such an insouciant attitude toward manuscript polish.
I hope the next segment displays better finish, as I'm looking forward to reading it.
(review of free book)