The Lady in Black

Rated 3.50/5 based on 6 reviews
(07/27/13-Revised Edit)

Book #1 in the series “A New Beginning”

A writer moves back to the City to return to the life he left behind; only to discover a life beyond his imagination.

The writer meets his next door neighbor and she introduces him to the world of femdom and light bdsm.Includes Femdom, Pegging/ Female on Male Strap-on usage. More
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Fiction » Erotica » BDSM
Words: 3,370
Language: English
ISBN: 9781458021403
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Review by: Kenneth Bryant on June 30, 2012 :
This is actually not such a bad story, if more than a little unoriginal.

The problem, and the reason it didn't feel right to give it more stars, is that it's in serious need of copy-editing. It's full of grammar errors, misused capitalisation, repeated words, and typos.

I hope the quality of Alan's work gets better, though, and I look forward to reading more.
(review of free book)

Review by: Lotta Bangs on March 30, 2012 :
This was only the second submissive story I have read. I found both rather dull because there was no passion to involve me. However I did enjoy the description of all the gear and that the woman made sure he didn’t make a mess of her place. Is it lack of ability to feel emotion that makes a sub? How sad if so. Even in that case, I’m sure the story would be improved with more feeling involved—hope, apprehension, worry, distrust of her soothing, anticipation, beginning excitement, arousal of his nerve endings, fear, horror, more excitement, full arousal, really getting into it, finally trust.

Also your writing is disjointed and doesn’t flow. There is too much repetition and unnecessary detailing of simple movement at the beginning, which should have been simplified, compacted and taken for granted. You need to learn to edit better. Word’s corrections are not good enough; you cannot rely on them alone. You need to read your work again several times, aloud if necessary, to smooth it and catch the omissions, incorrect words and irritating repetitions of the same words and phrases, then recheck after doing some other writing, when you can approach the first piece afresh and really see what is actually on the page. It still needs more smoothing, but inserting the following corrections will help and hopefully show you what to look out for.

He had some => He’d had some; neighbors, He => neighbors, he; upstairs; and => upstairs, and; jacket; all which => jacket, all of which (don’t trust Word’s suggestions about semicolons—they only separate sections which both have to be complete sentences in themselves; just having the first section complete is not enough, stick to commas when in doubt); conservation => conversation; He Asked. => He asked. go into the homes a total stranger => homes of total strangers OR home of a total stranger; woman; and he was going to allow her blindfold him.=> woman—and he was going to let her blindfold him? OR he was allowing her to blindfold him? afterwards, well => afterwards—well; buckling it in the back => buckling it at the back; ball gag you => ball gag on you; raise your head up => raise your head OR lift your head up; “It made of => It is made of; to much => too much; still spread eagle from => still spread eagled; Surgeon like => surgeon like; swollen ass hole? distended, stretched, tingling, maybe, but not swollen; items, as she seemed => items; she seemed; back his apartment => back to his apartment.
(review of free book)

Review by: Future Slayer Girl (aka kitten) on Oct. 18, 2011 :
Now THAT is good BDSM story! Be still my little subbie heart, I'm not into woman but I might let Mistress Carmen have some fun with me!
(review of free book)

Review by: Megan James on Aug. 02, 2011 :
Like it a lot, short but kept me interested to the end, well written.
(review of free book)

Review by: GreyEyes Green on July 17, 2011 :
A welcoming start to a creative world of interesting and complicated characters. Strong visuals, intricate descriptions and an engaging sense of good storytelling. A gem.
(reviewed within a month of purchase)

Review by: Saffron Sands on July 16, 2011 :
I found this story to be a lovely introduction to the world of Femdom and BDSM.
(review of free book)

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