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When not writing, Jessica Buike enjoys spending time with her husband and many pets (including cats, rabbits, and a neurotic Border Collie). She currently resides in Bellevue, Nebraska and loves living in the Midwest because the weather gives her something to complain about.
on Jan. 15, 2012 :
I often find that picking up a book by an author I've never read before is like trying a new restaurant. You may not know the menu but you've read a couple reviews on Yelp, or maybe seen it on the street as you passed by. When I sat down with Twin Rivers, by Jessica Buike, I had a hankering for some steak. For those of you of an herbivore persuasion, I'm sure there's something that you like as much as I like steak (the reviewer does not actually believe this statement... he really likes steak), so think of that. You may be saying, "Hey now, that's a tall order to fill," but hear me out.
From the start of the book, I caught glimpses of steak out of the corner of my eye. The prose was solid, the main plot points laid out clearly, the mystery established. There was steak in the air. So imagine my surprise when the meal arrives, and it's the size of a quarter. Now I thought, maybe this is one of those really up-scale places, where the quality of the dish out-weighs the quantity, and took a bite. Well... at least it wasn't overcooked. But that's about all I can say. It certainly hadn't been marinaded with care or seasoned to perfection. Don't get me wrong, the best steak (real steak this time, not a metaphor) that I've ever eaten was cooked over a campfire and seasoned with nothing but pepper... but that's because I was starving. It's risky for a new, indie book author to assume that her customers are going to be starving, especially with the buffet of ebooks out there.
So let's break it down. First off, the book has the hallmarks of a decent mystery. Main character with amnesia waking from a 2 year coma after her body was found under questionable circumstances. Good, good. Now here's the problem. A good mystery has to build suspense. I felt the beginnings of suspense stir, but that was it. When you're only working with a few thousand words, there just isn't room to develop the sense of who-done-it that a story like this requires. There were literally only 4 characters with names. Granted, the main character was only named once, halfway through the book, but I was pretty sure she wasn't the culprit. Oh, and one of those characters was a cat. Didn't really have to wonder who the villain was, once the ghostly children were cleared of suspicion.
And here's the biggest problem with the book: the dialogue. Namely, there isn't any. With the exception of 66 words, the entire story is narrated in the main character's head, in the first person. For all I know, the entire town was populated strictly by mutes and mimes... or isn't populated at all. I guess that could be creepy. You need to build the intrigue. Have the main character asking questions and speaking with real characters, with names. Draw out the creepy ghost children bits. Add more of them. Have them reaching out to touch her, getting closer and closer with every attempt. Make most of the book take place in a week long rainstorm if you have to. Create daring escapes and exciting chase scenes, darn it! Don't tell me what the doctor said, have a conversation with the doctor in which the information comes out! Want to throw suspicion off the villain? Give them some scenes! Not descriptions of scenes, actual scenes, with imagery, clever word-play, give and take. Add some seasoning!
I know, we've all heard it a thousand times and it's trite and superficial, but show, don't tell. I think what frustrated me the most was that this book could have been a fun read. Put some meat on that story and create some meaningful character interactions, and this would be a restaurant that I'd recommend to friends, co-workers, and people I met on the street. As it is, I may come back and give it another try... but I'd have to be hungry.
(reviewed within a week of purchase)
on Dec. 31, 2011 :
For a short story, this was a very intense read. I literally could not put this down. It still kind of stays with me as I remember parts of it here and there throughout the day. There certainly wasn’t anything missing considering how short the novella was.
I don’t read many true thrillers but this was one that could become a classic. It takes a normal thrill scenario and adds a few unexpected twists. I saw the end coming but didn’t want to acknowledge it and pretended to myself to be surprised. I talked it over with myself several times and decided it couldn’t have been any other way.
I really enjoyed reading this story even though it kept me up that night. It was intense, and the storyline was well played out and kept me rooting for the main character throughout. This is a definite must read if you enjoy suspense at all.
(reviewed long after purchase)
on Aug. 14, 2011 :
This story was short, but enjoyable. The main character, Rhiannon, has been in a coma for 2 years. In that short time, her parents have both died and her life as she knew it is gone. The reader will experience Rhiannon's nightmare with her, it appears very real. Rhiannon is a strong character, she has her ups and downs; the reader will want to know her better, the book crops her story closed rather quickly. She meets Mal, befriends him, and quickly becomes "something more" to him. She eventually remembers that Mal was an integral part of her earlier life; it should not be lost on the reader that Mal means "bad" in Spanish. The end of the novel is both surprising and somewhat horrifying, but the author plays it out so the reader must make his/her own decision on deciding if what was done was just.
This book is very short, a reader should be able to finish the novel in less than an hour. This book is recommended to young adults/adults who enjoy horror stories.
(reviewed within a week of purchase)