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on Jan. 12, 2012 :
I thought it was great, and especially the first book.
The only thing I'd recommend is changing the way the inner monologue is written. Sometimes, the way you've got it is okay, but, when there's that much of it, it's probably best to see how it's typically formatted. Personally, I like to separate it, the way I would dialogue, but, instead of quotation marks, I use italics. However, there are different ways of writing internal dialogue, so maybe try Google.
Also, reviewer below says there needs to be an explanation that its three books, but it says right on the front cover that it's three. I don't understand where the animosity is coming from, in the review below. Why the insult, and why continue reading? Why do you have to check his other work to see if it's terrible? Seems like pent up anger.
(review of free book)
on Oct. 23, 2011 :
There really needs to be a table of contents or some kind of intro that explains this is supposed to be 3 different stories under 1 main title as I reached the end of story one (which had no real ending, no outcome and left me very annoyed that no resolutions had been reached) and was confused to suddenly be reading a completely whole other story without any warning or indication of THE END.
If this book was proofread then it wasn't done well with silly mistakes like rode for road and where for were as well as hypenated words that didn't need to be.
Story 1 is terrible, there's WAY too much back story for the characters involved and not enough actual content of story proper. I'm a few pages into story 2 and about to give up on it because you are told she's the most boring character there is so I don't see anything to gain from reading her angle.
Using different sized fonts for different stories (and internal thought monologues) was a VERY bad idea and is also intially confusing until you turn a few pages and realise why the font has changed. Again, something the author could have explained in a short intro.
I will try to finish this if I can, I can't see me enjoying it though.
If the author does read this comment, consider taking this book offline to write an explanatory intro about that its 3 different stories, do thoughts ONLY as smaller font and explain that in the intro and do all 3 stories in the same sized font also fixing the spelling mistakes.
I'll have to read some of his other stuff to see if they are as meandering as this.
(review of free book)