I truly believe that as Ms Squires grows she will become quite a talent... At the moment the style is still a little rough around the edges but this is made up for with the detached descriptions of death that give us a look into the mind of her killer... Ms Squires needs to find more confidence in her writing and risk throwing herself into a longer work... I will be watching her progress
The Spoken confession is written much like a monologue with the narrators actions added as an aside. This is an usual style that surprisingly works very well.
Michael has done well to use this style as a debut piece and I take my hat off to him for a job well done.
I would like to see this style used again, maybe in a fictional piece that runs for a longer word count.