This is one of the most boring stories I have ever read. I think many details could have been omitted. The characters are not fully developed and come across as quite stupid, for want of a better word. I read it through hoping it would finally develop into an exciting, entertaining story, but was sorely disappointed. Needs to be reworked.
I have to agree with my fellow reviewers - the book lacks tension and the present tense is very difficult to follow. I think that the use of the present tense takes away any depth, rendering the story flat. I certainly would not pay money to read the remaining volumes.
Truly epic - I could not put my iPad down. Characters are well-balanced and believable. I cannot wait for the next book. It has been a long time since I have read such a captivating story. Hats off to you! Please keep writing. Talent such as yours must be shared with the world.
A Thread in the Tangle
on Nov. 08, 2013
How can anyone review your book if all you allow is Epub?
Look at other writers - they offer many options.
I just started reading this story and could not continue after a few pages because of spelling and grammar errors in almost every sentence. It promises to be a good tale, but needs to be thoroughly edited.
Was this written by a couple of teenagers? Overuse of adjectives - out of context. Too many spelling and grammatical errors. I have read about 1/3 of the story and cannot continue. Maybe this book will appeal to the young adult and teen readers, but it certainly will not help to improve their language skills.
A good attempt. The characters need to be fine tuned and the story needs to flow more smoothly. I felt myself becoming irritated with the utter stupidity of most characters - perhaps the author attempted to portray them as complacent, but they unfortunately did not come across as such.
A sweet romance. The characters are believable and although the story follows the standard "romance" formula, it is very enjoyable and easy to read. I cannot wait to read more about Keira, Aaron and Anna.
Outstanding! I could not put this book down, and now that I've reached the end, I want more. I do hope that Saira and friends will find their way into my library once (or twice) more. Thank you for spinning a fine tale.
Try again in a few years. Had I known of the particular sexual angle beforehand, I would not have read the book. Please declare all content and repost your book, especially as some parents might not want their teens to read about these things.
on July 19, 2014
Groan! I could not get past page 17. Please go back to school and try to pass your English courses - all of them.
Magnificent! I could not put this story down. Please wrote a follow-up to this. I think the world needs to know more of Mol and the others. You are truly a gifted writer and should continue to share your talent.