This is one of the most boring stories I have ever read. I think many details could have been omitted. The characters are not fully developed and come across as quite stupid, for want of a better word. I read it through hoping it would finally develop into an exciting, entertaining story, but was sorely disappointed. Needs to be reworked.
I have to agree with my fellow reviewers - the book lacks tension and the present tense is very difficult to follow. I think that the use of the present tense takes away any depth, rendering the story flat. I certainly would not pay money to read the remaining volumes.
Truly epic - I could not put my iPad down. Characters are well-balanced and believable. I cannot wait for the next book. It has been a long time since I have read such a captivating story. Hats off to you! Please keep writing. Talent such as yours must be shared with the world.
A Thread in the Tangle
on Nov. 08, 2013
How can anyone review your book if all you allow is Epub?
Look at other writers - they offer many options.
Was this written by a couple of teenagers? Overuse of adjectives - out of context. Too many spelling and grammatical errors. I have read about 1/3 of the story and cannot continue. Maybe this book will appeal to the young adult and teen readers, but it certainly will not help to improve their language skills.
A good attempt. The characters need to be fine tuned and the story needs to flow more smoothly. I felt myself becoming irritated with the utter stupidity of most characters - perhaps the author attempted to portray them as complacent, but they unfortunately did not come across as such.
A sweet romance. The characters are believable and although the story follows the standard "romance" formula, it is very enjoyable and easy to read. I cannot wait to read more about Keira, Aaron and Anna.
Outstanding! I could not put this book down, and now that I've reached the end, I want more. I do hope that Saira and friends will find their way into my library once (or twice) more. Thank you for spinning a fine tale.
Try again in a few years. Had I known of the particular sexual angle beforehand, I would not have read the book. Please declare all content and repost your book, especially as some parents might not want their teens to read about these things.
on July 19, 2014
Groan! I could not get past page 17. Please go back to school and try to pass your English courses - all of them.
Magnificent! I could not put this story down. Please wrote a follow-up to this. I think the world needs to know more of Mol and the others. You are truly a gifted writer and should continue to share your talent.
What a beautiful story! I felt drawn into the tale and could not put it down. I have already downloaded books 2 and 3 and cannot wait to read them. You are truly a gifted storyteller and I am grateful that you have shared your gift with the world. Happy Holidays!
Love this story - a good mix of adventure, romance, humor and suspense. The characters are well-developed and believable. i enjoyed a few laugh-out-loud momemts. Cannot wait for the rest of the series. Welll done!
I really enjoyed the story. The characters are likeable and the story unfolds quite nicely. I have to agree with my fellow reader - a little more emotion would be nice. Overall, it was a good read and I look forward to the next installment(s).
The story is a bit slow - certainly nowhere close to Tolkien's works. The "heroes" need to work together, not run and hide during times of difficulty or duress. I have read stories that draw you in and keep you wanting more. This is not one.
Well, I thought that this secon book would be an improvement on the first, but I am sadly disappointed. Grammatical errors, too much repetition, wrong word usage - just to name a few problems. I kept waiting for the story to pick up speed and the characters to develop some backbone but got to the end wondering why I wasted money and time on this. Sorry, but much improvement is needed.
Interesting story. I do not read dark fiction/fantasy much, but I must say that this is very well-written and as realistic as one can get. The brutal reality portrayed is a bit unsettling, but that is what separates regular fiction/fantasy from dark, I would guess.
Overall, a very good read. Congratulations!