Writer and co-writer of eighteen books of different genres and lengths.
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Smashwords book reviews by T.J. Edison
- All Night Long, I Remember You
on Aug. 19, 2011
I read the first two lines:
I thought I would get used to the bumpy roads leading to the City of Taragona eventually. I left the place eleven years ago and nothing seemed to change.
In my humble opnion, they sound better thus:
I thought I would eventually get used to the bumpy roads leading to the City of Taragona. I'd left the place eleven years ago and nothing had changed.
The dialogue was in part, meaningful.
This long and wordy account needs editing, the punctuation, the syntax and sentence structure, the typos and the tenses need to be dealt with.
Not that I'm perfect, but editing is part of writing.
That's the good thing about writing, you don't have to get it right first time, not like a brain surgeon.
So, Rona, go through this with your fine tooth-comb and polishing brush.
Best of luck,
Melanie (Author name)
And the best of luck.
- Lifesphere INC: Acquisition
on May 21, 2013
I like this style of writing, fast moving, low on adjectives. The plot sounds good and I will read more when I have time off from writing.
Well done Talitha and thank you.