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  • The Contract Killer on Nov. 21, 2012

    A fairly good story. I didn't like the ending. The fight scene where Killer took on four criminals with a small knife while they basicly stood and watched is fantasy and needs work. The editing is bad, lots of misspelled, misused, missing and extra words. Needs a professional edit. With work it could be a very good read.
  • The Dogtrot Murder - a Carter A. Johnson novel on Nov. 24, 2012

    I read the Blonde Heiress first and liked it (a bit short) and I loved this story. I was engrossed by the account of Kate in prison. Her feelings and experiences seemed real. Then the author skipped back and forth between her and the main character Carter. The action really started as Carter tried to prove Kate's innocence. The characters are described so clearly I thought I could smell Kinky. Carter is one kick ass vigilante.
  • The Last Cowboy on Nov. 28, 2012

    The Last Cowboy is on of those stories I've read and wondered why it was written or why I took the time to read it. I don't feel it belongs in the Thriller/Suspense category and don't really know where it does fit. It's got a supernatural element about people who in the end aren't there. It is well written but it's definitely not my kind of story.
  • Free to Die on Nov. 28, 2012

    Finally a great mystery story. Congratulations to the author. The characters are great and I'd like to read more about the leads. Editing needs some work, but it's not terrible.
  • Early Birds on Dec. 02, 2012

    Early birds is a good read. The plot is fresh and interesting and the crooks are not the bad guys we expect in most crime stories. The bad side is the editing. There are the usual missing and misspelled words but additionally the author has mixed past and present tense until it is a major distraction. Even so it's a good story.
  • Painted Leo: Short Story on Dec. 02, 2012
    (no rating)
    I read this and stayed with it until the end but did not get into it or enjoy it. I don't feel it belong in the category it's under because I didn't experience a thrill or suspense while reading it. Maybe it should be in Romance or some literary theme. Since others appear to enjoy it I'll pass on giving it a low rating.
  • Blood Is Heavier on Dec. 07, 2012
    (no rating)
    I have several negative comments about Blood Is Heavier. The opening action scene was so overly descriptive that it detracted from the action, descriptive on top of descriptive. Then back story took over and ran page after page. Finally we got to the meat of the story but by then we'd gone 30%. Then there was more descriptives and introspection on top of introspection. It's over the top and ruins a very good story at the core. The action scenes are pathetic. I was hoping half way through this to give it a decent rating but it continued to get worse. No rating. Appearently others are more generous to this than I'm feeling.
  • Coral Sea Affair on Dec. 07, 2012

    A great read dragged down by a lack of editing. The main character is engaging and the plot is believable. I recommend it if you can ignore or skip over the errors.
  • The Maine Event on Dec. 07, 2012

    Josh and Dana are presented in The Maine Event. I assume this is the prequel to Early Birds. Once it gets past the introductions it's a slow paced story that gradually evolves into a crime mystery with a shoot out finale. A good innocent read for all ages. Editing is the biggest holdback, mixing of past and present tense in the same sentences is distracting.
  • The Cover Up on Dec. 21, 2012

    The Cover Up is interesting but the author is a story teller who needs help. It sorely needs a professional edit: words missing, spelling and holes in the plot. The writing is wordy; twenty percent or more of the words could be eliminated without affecting the storyline. It would improve the readability. There are several plot problems where the actions described are impossible or highly improbable. With effort it could be a higher rated book.
  • Murder: A Love Story on Jan. 08, 2013

    Murder: A Love Story is a simple, excellent, short story that is well written with good editing. Sort of a be careful of what you wish for type of tale. I recommend it if you like shorts.
  • The Baying Witness on Jan. 16, 2013

    Good, interesting, simple short story. The Sherriff is the main character, a laid back, mature, thoughtful, experienced professional. A quick ten minute read. Shame on R.J. Parker. Not realizing you had downloaded a short story is no reason to trash the work as it's presented. The word count is given. The author is not at fault, you are.
  • The Antigirl Murders - Let's Begin on Jan. 17, 2013

    This story went downhill from MAYBE to WIERD. It didn't end, it just stopped and there'll be a continuation in another book. It's wordy and went from a Detective/Mystery to a social statement.
  • A Lost Lady on March 16, 2013

    Ex-detective Ben Hood again shines in this Australian story. Whether in the out back or trudging through a swamp full of Crocodiles he always gets the bad guys. Thanks to the author for another fine read.
  • A Lost Lady on March 16, 2013

    Ex-detective Ben Hood again shines in this Australian story. Whether in the out back or trudging through a swamp full of Crocodiles he always gets the bad guys. Thanks to the author for another fine read.
  • Retribution on March 16, 2013

    I suppose this qualifies as Noir. I'm sure I've read it before and now it's back. The story's plot is okay and the main character is bigger than life. But somehow it just doesn't come together for me. I got tired of the bum like main character and never felt a bond to him.
  • Angel Eyes on March 27, 2013

    The characters and scenes of Angel Eyes are over the top and have to be viewed as tongue in cheek. I enjoyed the story but the editing is horrible. The author can spell, osculation, oneiric, countervail, and prosaically correctly but then uses mussel instead of a gun's muzzle and sigh instead of sign. Please clean this up so it isn't so distracting. I felt the ending scenes were very contrived to get the result the author wanted.
  • A Dream of Death (Detective Lincoln Munroe, Book 1) on March 30, 2013

    Excellent. The lead character, Lincoln Munroe, chases a serial killer and his own personal demons and failings in this well written story. The ending was unexpected and make me feel for the man who was fighting his past and trying to rebuild his future. I recommend it.
  • Return To Trinity on May 15, 2013

    Excellent story, terrible editing. The characters are fresh and the action is intense.
  • Bliss Out on May 20, 2013

    The plot of Bliss Out is far fetched but interesting. The main characters are all bad or pure evil. Editing is better than most indy books but far from perfect. Several issues that come to mind are professional killers in hiding often walking around unarmed, people from the rogue agency saving a mans life only to kill him a few days later, and the main anti-hero being so gullible as to believe the new man in charge would change previous policy. I would give the story itself a 3.5, but since that's not possible it's a 4.0. A note to the author. If you insist on making cheap shot political comments in your novels you will alienate forty percent of your potential readers. If your goal is not selling the maximum number of books then continue with your partisan diatribe. You've turned me off and I will not read any more of your books.
  • Behind The Horned Mask: Book 1 on May 24, 2013

    The author of this story keeps injecting himself into the story to state he's not a writer and to apologize for his shortcomings. If he isn't a writer why should I read his story. I got bored early and quit.
  • The Tattered Thread on May 24, 2013

    The Tattered Thread is so full of detailed descriptions that it became mind numbing. And so many characters were introduced and described early on that I lost track of who each one was. I quit early on.
  • Remembering on May 26, 2013

    The mystery plot of this story involves people who kidnap, drug, rape and sometimes murder young girls. Not a pleasant topic but it's handled well. The sex scenes are intense but not overly graphic. For me the best parts of the story were the dialog scenes between Mel, Boxcar, Ginger and Mrs. Giamonte. The exchanges were hilarious. The editing is not terrible, but needs a lot of work. The author needs to look up the definitions for passed and past and learn the difference. Otherwise congratulations on a good book.
  • Jet on July 02, 2013

    Wow! What an exciting story. It started fast and kicked into overdrive and didn't let up. Jet reminds me of the lead character from the movie 'Columbiana', another killing machine assassin. A fun read.
  • The Second Amendment #1 on July 08, 2013

    A good, timely read. It's a lead in to a second book so if you want to know how the President fares you'll have to go to book 2. The characters are portrayed realistically and I liked them, even the bad guys. It needs to be edited. Some sentences were hard to grasp because of poor editing.
  • A Reason to Live (Marty Singer Mystery #1) on March 10, 2014

    An excellent read, well written and edited. I recommend it highly.
  • Don't Expect Anything on March 10, 2014

    This story would be rated higher if the editing wasn't so atrocious. As it is I've stretched the rating upward. Just about every error that can be made has been. There are no line spaces between scenes so it all runs together and the reader has to stop and figure out who is talking and where the scene has changed to. Now the good points. The story is good and holds the reader's interest. The characters are portrayed clearly and their behavior and actions are consistent. I hope the author engages a professional editor, the story telling deserves one. One last complaint, the title is horrible.
  • CHOICES: Karolyn's Story on March 25, 2014

    A good story, I feel like I might have met the characters at some time in real life. It's well written and believable and I liked the ending. I read very few romance stories because they're usually too girly and overdone, but I liked this one. Watching Karolyn mature into a better person was handled well. My girl friend recommended it to me.
  • From Darkness on May 25, 2014

    There's a decent story here but the writing doesn't support it. Many words are misused and the writing is stiff and unnatural. Overall the editing appears to be nonexistent.
  • Dairyland Murders Book 1: Head in a Haymow on May 25, 2014

    This is definitely a 'girlie' book. It was interesting and the story was original but like other books I've read by female authors it lacks the details I want. I like to know more about the material things used by the characters. Also, I never learned where the money at the heart of the plot came from. A good read but heavy on distraught, self questioning emotions.
  • Static on May 25, 2014

    A very good story. There's plenty of conflict and a twisted surprise ending. The characters are well defined and interesting. I didn't like the over use of worn out clichés. I would rate it a 4.5 if I could.
  • The Jailer's Son: The Legend Begins on May 25, 2014

    I don't normally read stories about the old cowboy days, especially coming of age stories. However this story was different and the characters were interesting. I enjoyed it and recommend it.
  • City of Brotherly Sins on May 25, 2014

    I would describe the style of this story as noir. It has surprises and plenty of conflict and was captivating from beginning to end.
  • Dancing with Mortality on May 25, 2014

    This is the best story I have read at Smashwords. Congratulations to the author. The plot is excellent and the writing and editing are good.
  • The Pursuit of Emma on May 25, 2014
    (no rating)
    At 10% I thoroughly disliked the wimpy, whiney main character. At 13% I was too bored to continue. I won't rate it because someone else may like this a whole lot more than I did.
  • Pension Day on Aug. 10, 2014

    Short but excellent. Be warned, this is violent and graphic.
  • The Hammer on Aug. 10, 2014

    Good plot and interesting for a short story. Very British, difficult for Americans to read and understand because of the slang.
  • In the Shadow of El Paso on Aug. 10, 2014

    I like each of the two short stories under this title. They are well written and compress a lot of emotion in such short tales.
  • Till The Moon Falls on Aug. 22, 2014

    A very good tale about a reluctant good guy who is in over his head but finally figures out who the antagonists are. Try it, it's good.
  • Of Poisoned Minds on Aug. 27, 2014

    A good and well written story. My biggest complaint was the constant, never ending emotional and pregnancy drama of Garner. Also the editing needs further review. But it is still a good read. Also the relationship between the killer and Ming Lee as well as her lip lock and rubbing on Morton was never explained.
  • Reverse Metamorphosis Book One of the Irrevocable Change Trilogy, The Evolution of an Assassin on Sep. 03, 2014

    An excellent read. Down and dirty. Long enough that it took me three long evenings to finish. Well defined characters. The story flows well and I like the details of the hits. I recommend it if you like in depth crime stories.
  • The Assassin Evolves Book Two of the Irrevocable Change Trilogy on Sep. 17, 2014

    This author really gets inside the heads of his characters. The hit on Johnny Lee Bolton and his girlfriend was so detailed it was scary. A great story. It also had unexpected twist just like book one. I'm impressed by this writer.
  • The Devil’s Homecoming Book Three of the Irrevocable Change Trilogy on Oct. 05, 2014

    I'm glad this assassin wasn't portrayed as a hero who rode off into the sunset. Although I cheered for him at times his bad side was presented realistically and I accepted he was evil. It was interesting to see his interaction with family and how he played the FBI. The ending and the epilog were great. It was refreshing to read about a killer where the author concentrated on defining the character and showed his interpersonal relations instead of just the blood and guts of killing. This whole series has been great and I recommend it.
  • Maelstrom: The Downing of Eagle21 on Oct. 09, 2014

    The plot of this story and the characters are very interesting, but the lack of editing makes reading it a chore.
  • 59 Hours on Oct. 17, 2014

    An excellent short read. Many twist and turns I couldn't see coming. The main characters are pure evil and deserving of the worst outcome. I highly recommend it.
  • The Blonde Heiress, a Carter A. Johnson novella on Oct. 30, 2014

    A lot of plot and action is crammed into this novella. Carter is a tough vigilante who is one step behind the antagonist until the end. The fight scenes and gun fights are believable and well executed. I highly recommend this story if you like a lot of action from a kick ass vigilante.