There is definitely a story here but like the previous reviewer, the numerous grammatical errors and editing issues made the story difficult to get through. The writer's style is very conversational and full of slang that makes the story seem very immature. Extensive editing and rewriting is needed to bring this story to life the way I feel it deserves to be. I usually don't write reviews, but I really think in the end that this writer has promise. I am giving 3 stars for a great first effort.