B. Handy
Biography
For now, throwing up free flash under 1,000 words when possible. Will start adding deeper fictional tales later in 2012 now that time is finally on my side to dedicate to an entire series or three. In the meantime, scraps for the poor. :D
I appreciate any and all reviews and as detailed as possible, for no critique is too harsh on the path of improvement. Thanks.
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Books
Nice This Time of Year
by B. Handy
Price: Free! 490 words.
Published on January 17, 2012. Fiction.
Romania is a beautiful country to visit, for it is brimming with history... some still living.
Shiny Gifts And Wet Promises
by B. Handy
Price: Free! 1620 words.
Published on December 30, 2011. Fiction.
The odd couple and their equally odd encounters in the office late one night.
Rubbish
by B. Handy
Price: Free! 870 words.
Published on December 18, 2011. Fiction.
(1.00 from 2 reviews)
Putting the pieces together from a wild night while managing to lose them at the same time.
Cherries
by B. Handy
Price: Free! 390 words.
Published on December 18, 2011. Fiction.
(1.00 from 1 review)
Letting a child's imagination run wild can sometimes lead to trouble.
Degrees of Love
by B. Handy
Price: Free! 580 words.
Published on December 8, 2011. Fiction.
(2.00 from 1 review)
A burn on the hand is worth a notch in the belt.
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Smashwords book reviews by B. Handy
- Pinochle Anyone?
on Jan. 11, 2012
I frequent a writing group every week and we make it a point to edit, revise, and review each others work as all three are invaluable to any writer. This is what I noticed:
“Sam took a sip of his drink and wiped the acquired condensation from his cold glass on his pant leg before opening the box to withdraw the deck.”
This seemed a bit wordy for such a minor detail. Even just removing acquired may have kept this from leaping out at me or if just to omit a ‘his’, “wiped the glasses’ condensation on his pant leg”.
“as it was his custom to allow the cards to ‘hatch.’”
I’m not a card player so this term sent me into a Google search (which yielded no results oddly enough). Perhaps state what’s happening and then add the term? This bit threw me off track considerably.
“I agree, not that I intend to loose.” Lose as in the opposite of win, loose as in the opposite of tight.
“And I’ll close the blinds. (Missing a closing quotation mark here).
Good story with some minor details that could use tweaking. The use of hatch was what really took me out of the story, mainly because it’s a term I could not figure out with a quick Google search. Otherwise, nothing too major and a clear enough picture was formed in my head while reading.
