I can't remember laughing so much over a story in a long time, maybe even ever! (don't let your head swell too much Johnny). A hilarious twist on the concept every GCSE language student will be aware of. Download NOW!
I think after reading all the stories published on smashwords by this author, this one is still my favourite. It flows so easily and the interaction between the two brothers is just right. Young boys curiosity usually leads to trouble but the twist at the end of this tale is brilliant. Yes the story ends abruptly but it feels right. Brilliant, ingenious and well written!
I laughed so much when I read this, along with saying Urgh! in various places
I think I would of avoided Mr George in the opticians too! My only complaint would be it would be nice to hear more of Mr George's adventures. (Though not as Jonathan Strickland warns, a visit to the doctors!)
I thought this such a fascinating concept, and found myself wondering why nobody had thought of it as a subject to write about before now. Maybe it was too much of a touchy subject on both sides of the fence! The author however handled the subject with his usual wit and style and the result was an amazing story which I'm sure got us all thinking, writers and readersalike. Great job Jonny!
I love this poem! It's brilliant and has comic and sinister moments in turn. I can see in years to come (many years) could even find itself on the school curriculum for analysis! Though many people here would prob disagree! Good poem!
I loved this story. The moors, the atmosphere, the characters and the way they interacted with one another. And I loved the lucky beetle. The story draws you in gradually becoming more and more scary as mervin badman takes shape on the page. But back to reality, I thought the lucky beetle side plot was excellent which is why i preferred that ending it drew the story to a close better. Brilliant story Jonny i've gotta say!
I really enjoyed this story. After everyone's reviews about grammar I was expecting this to detract from the reading however not once did my mind stray from the witty style of narrative. I loved the tale of Barse Yole's quest, and ultimate demise. Wonderfully told in classic 'Jonny' style!
This is a really fun little story. You did really well Jonny, I remember when this challenge was set and it took mick a couple of attempts and I barely saw him! This story is great, you don't need to add anymore to it, it's all there. Good work with 500 words.
I enjoyed this little story. I was aware of the writing challenge between Michael and jonny so was interested to see what they would come up with! Jonny's story I found really interesting and an original way to tackle the subject matter.
This is a wonderful little story full of emotion and character. I love this author's style of writing, it flows so easily as the characters and plot develop. I look forward to reading about the rest of Silver's adventures.
What can I say? I wasn't completely sure I had the right Michael Carter there for a while.... But definitely mad, funny and worth a read!!! Think he was a little harsh on the spoon though-surely it could of been rehabilitated?!!