This story was well written but a bit repetitive. The main character kept obsessing over what had been done to him in the same way over and over. This story doesn’t read like erotica, it’s written more like a horror storey, there’s just no heat.
It was written from the point of view of the victim. With the victims memories fading in and out and focused on the words she remembers of her new master commenting about her progress. It was very disjointed and not hot or sexy.
This was a good story with a nice romantic ending that just made me smile. Some good hot sex and a good story, loved it. To top it all off the author is very sexy and it is easy to imagine her in the role of the female lead.
A nice twist on the transformed by a drug story and presented with a good setup but ultimately never developed to it’s full potential. She was given 14 lollipops but the story ends after she has 2 and he accepts the transformation to quickly. Could have been much better.
The story turns a bit darker but is still a great follow-up. I hope we see more of Ashley enjoying her degradation in spite of herself and not a decent into Jon brutally abusing her just because he can.
It seems like it could be a good story but it is almost impossible to read due to numerous misspellings, typos, and mangled sentences. As an example for several paragraphs approximately 13% into the book “Malcolm” one of the main characters became “welcome”. Hopefully this will get cleaned up and republished, but till then stay away.
A sexy well written story. This is a slightly different twist to the usual mind control and body mod story with a dash of blackmail. The victim is tricked into doing most of it to herself and by the time she realizes what is going on she is stuck between a financial/rock and a bimbo/hard place.
I must agree with the other reviewer as far as the spelling and sentence structure are concerned. This needs an editor so badly and it’s such a shame too, because the story has some real potential. The readability deserves 1 star but the story is a 3 or 4 when you can fallow it, so I will give it 2 overall. I hope the author reads this and edits the story.