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Smashwords book reviews by gholan

  • Ember Rising Light (Book One) on Nov. 16, 2011
    (no rating)
    I liked the story but, I felt the charectors were wrong. (This is a little spoiler) They both moved out into the world at a young age and moved around a lot. That should have made them more mature than they were portrayed. Ember was said to be very book smart on top of that but, she acted like a ditzy ten or twelve year old and her brother was barely better. I don't have a problem with the content of the story just that it does not match they're background. The male charector should have less flighty thoughts and brood on a single problem more. Something like he has a problem and he thinks of multiple ways to solve it. He can even sound out his idea's to someone trusted. His panic attacks/shocks should be internal also. I not telling the author how to write her book but, I think with some tweaking it would be more enjoyable.