I should say I enjoyed reading the short story. Is it a short story? I mean, it goes on and on for like thirty pages! The idea is quite good. Where did you get this idea? The first thing I thought of when I read this was the Imperius Curse. So similar. J. K. Rowling would love to know about this scientiic Imperius Curse.
The woman detective doesnt do anything. I thought she will be like Sherlock Holmes. A bit disappointed with the detective. Overall the story was good. Thanks.