A good story, written very well, that delivers a superb punch at the end. My only question/comment is that I did not get the ending. I don't mean to give the ending away, but I think the authors need to go a little more in-depth as to why this room has this mysterious window in the first place. Is it literal? Imagined? Metaphysical? Other than that, good story!
This was a great short story, with clever verse and tons of suspense. I loved the character of Oliver and the dilemma he found himself in. My only comment/constructive critique is that I feel the author spent so much time setting up the twist that, when it finally came, it was somewhat of a let-down. I guess I just expected a bigger bang. And I'm still not sure I quite understand the character of Tom. Regardless, this was a well-written story, worthy of reading, and I look forward to reading more from this author.
This was a good short story. The author was very descriptive, and she captured the scene and surroundings perfectly. The story made me feel like I was actually in the jungle with these characters.
Aside from a few punctuation and spelling errors, my biggest critique is that the story doesn't seem all that original. Jonathan is a wealthy, uptight know-it-all who belittles Riley, the expert guide, through the entire story. When their differences reach a boiling point, the story progresses exactly as one would expect it to. I did like the petroglyph reveal, that was clever. However, the ending was too predictable.
Overall this author certainly has talent, especially with her details and setting, and if she continues to write and add depth to her twists and mysteries, she'll be great.
This is a decent read. The depictions of South African life and poaching are incredibly detailed and exciting. Sam Jenkins is a believable and charismatic protagonist, and the storyline is smart, fun, and full of action. It is definitely a page-turner.
As far as criticisms, the novel needs some editing work done. There are numerous typos and grammatical errors that catch your eye and make you stumble through the reading. That’s not uncommon in Smashwords books, but in several instances it detracted from the story.
Also, the love connection between Sam and Estelle seems cheapened by his affair with Linda. I never really was convinced that he did indeed love Estelle, and yet the author tries hard to make the reader think that is the case.
Aside from those two items, this is an excellent read. I went into this novel knowing absolutely nothing about poaching and really South Africa in general, and yet the author paints a perfect canvas with his words. I’m looking forward to checking out other works by him.
I'm not sure I quite understood this. The formatting and grammar and spelling mistakes probably didn't help either. I can understand a writer taking artistic liberties to tell his/her story, but this one was hard to follow. The story itself seems to be an important one, but it's sad that the writer didn't put a little more effort into the presentation.