Weird! But in a good way. It plays with the narrative to the point where I was questioning the motives of the narrator and not sure if I should trust what he was telling me or call him a liar. It is very blunt! Being "talked to" like that in a story is different.
I can't get past the mental image I created in my own head of that little girl on the train track when she felt the rumble of the coming train. Good solid creation of the fear in my own head. Not many writers do that well without describing every tiny detail. This one gets it. Well done!