I read this as soon as I received it (as a free gift from the author). It is a good lesson to impart to young children--it's okay to be different. There is also the lesson that you should not judge others just because they may be different than everyone else around them. A good story to read aloud to young children.
An interesting idea for a story. I understand what the author was going for, but I found the one sentence paragraphs a bit distracting and choppy for my taste. I think she had some good points about letting love takes its own course without interference from others, not matter how well intentioned.
I didn't find the humor in the story and found the dialog to be very stilted. And thought the disgust the brother showed in eating the dog biscuits was pretty over the top. I encourage the author to keep trying and to take a writing course where fellow authors can help her hone her craft and to give her honest feedback.
I did not even read this beyond the bowling alley scene. I found it hard to read -- not every move needs to be described. Most people have bowled before so it doesn't have to be pointed out that you pick up the ball from the upper part of the return. I found the sex talk and fake boobs showing-off very off-putting as well. I guess it just wasn't my kind of story.