Member Since: Feb. 04, 2012
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- Amethyst
on Feb. 04, 2012
The story itself was a good one. It’s true this author could use some help with grammar, punctuation and sentence structure. It’s annoying and sometimes distracting, but nothing that couldn’t be fixed with a good proof-reader. Unfortunately those quality services do not come *free* and this book *is*. It’s understandable. As for the comparisons to Nicky Charles? As a proofreader for Indie-Authors, for the last 3 years, I was at first dumbfounded as to whom Ms. Charles even was. I’d never heard of her. Upon looking up her work I can tell you, the *Strong Alpha takes Virginal Mate and all hell breaks loose,* formula is nothing new in this genre and probably the number one story line out of a choice of a possible 3 that sell. The E-Book industry is glutted with Paranormal Romance that naturally follows this similar theme. I’m sure you all remember those four books that came out a while back (wink). Everyone wants on that bandwagon, and it is expected that plots and story lines are going to overlap - there is only so much you can do with a singular idea. I have just finished 18 months of work beta-ing and proofing a novel that could also be considered ‘strangely similar” to both, Ms. Charles’ and Ms. Barett’s work, - a few of the characters even share the same or very similar (Gasp!) names - and I’ve found about 75 or so others for sale on that other much larger e-book sight. (another wink) I personally have worked on a dozen or so that share similar elements. VERY similar, over the last 6 months alone, and I am just one person. My point is, if you like that sort of thing you will probably like this. But it is really unfair to compare any story based on it’s similarities to another. If you prefer one’s writing over another fine. But as far as story goes there really isn’t anything unique about either one. As there isn’t about the genre itself. Does this story stand on it’s own merit? Yes. = 1 star Is the story line unique? No. None of them are considering the story is as old as time. Had it been I would have given it an additional star. = No star Is the story enjoyable and did the writer set out to do what she planned. Absolutely. - 2 stars Following the formula I use when giving an opinion on any authors work, I give this 3 stars. Had it had less formatting issues and been edited better, or at least proofed, I would have given it 4. Had it been more unique to the genre. 5. Good work Ms. Barett. Much success and/or enjoyment to you in this endeavor!
- The Mating
on Feb. 05, 2012
I was led to this book based on the reviews of the work of another - completely unrelated - author. Deciding to give Ms Charles work a quick read - just so I could see for myself what all the static was about. - before reviewing the other book. This was a very good and quick read. While some things seemed very contrived, - don’t want to spoil so I won’t go into detail , but the second shower scene and the perfume bit are but two. The female protagonist might just as well have had “WELCOME” stamped on her forehead, as she made a much better doormat than Alpha-Female for much of the story. I can understand her weakness and (spinelessness?) at the start, given her status it was expected. But as the story progressed, character development lacked. Elise should have grown into her role more than Ms. Charles allowed. I have for the last 3 years helped Indie-Authors Beta and Proof their work and I rate this story with the same formula I use for all works presented to me. The story stood on it’s own. = 1 star The Author accomplished what she intended by relaying and enjoyable story. =1 star The story was not unique. - I have found few that are. = no star. The editing and attention to detail was better than average for a free book. = 1 star. Personal like or dislike - the story felt contrived at certain junctures and I found my self at first pitying, and later irritated by the Female lead’s lack of back bone. = No star Nice Job Ms. Charles, I hope this endeavor brings you the enjoyment and success you seek!