Pretty good for Fan Fic. If you can't get enough Star Wars, go ahead and consume. The high point was a shaggy dog setup - the kid asking Khian "Did you score?" Of course, one could see it coming, but I still smiled.
This was my second dip into Smashwords, and I selected a random free read. On this basis, I won't bother to read other novels by Gremillion. Three fair character studies, Khian being the best, but this piece doesn't really make you CARE about the characters studied (except the kid).
M. T., your ending is too abrupt. You need to leave 'em pondering and smiling, not dazed! Enjoyable and possibly the start of a larger work. Great imagination and descriptions. Consider all the comments and rewrite as an exercise. I'd enjoy reading the result.
Fast-paced novel, attractive characters, easy read, hard to put down. Clever story. I recommend it. I read this one first, and didn't realize it was part of a trilogy. At least the first two can be read in either order. I'm looking forward to reading the third.
More than I expected; well written and engrossing. Not your usual coming of age story. The protagonists are children, but not simpletons. It's all about maturity and the right use of power. There is some nice description in the hunt for the rire (yes, that's its name). Looking forward to the sequel.
Wow! I'm going to have to re-read the first few chapters before I say much more than Wow! Merrill wrestles manfully (OK, boy-fully) with the fundamentals of existence to synthesize and communicate a comprehensive world view. Not for the faint of heart, but not hard to read. More later. If I figure it all out, I will award a 5th star for communication. Meanwhile, I recommend it to anyone wishing a good mind stretch.
I re-read this book and also an article about the Moreva experiment in 2013. There is still a gap in my understanding between subjective or local emergent time and common or global emergent time. I am awarding a fifth star for bringing this development, which has both physical and philosophical implications, to a wider audience. Well worth reading and re-reading by those interested in science and philosophy.