Pretty good for Fan Fic. If you can't get enough Star Wars, go ahead and consume. The high point was a shaggy dog setup - the kid asking Khian "Did you score?" Of course, one could see it coming, but I still smiled.
This was my second dip into Smashwords, and I selected a random free read. On this basis, I won't bother to read other novels by Gremillion. Three fair character studies, Khian being the best, but this piece doesn't really make you CARE about the characters studied (except the kid).
M. T., your ending is too abrupt. You need to leave 'em pondering and smiling, not dazed! Enjoyable and possibly the start of a larger work. Great imagination and descriptions. Consider all the comments and rewrite as an exercise. I'd enjoy reading the result.
Fast-paced novel, attractive characters, easy read, hard to put down. Clever story. I recommend it. I read this one first, and didn't realize it was part of a trilogy. At least the first two can be read in either order. I'm looking forward to reading the third.