I loved the title. The story could benefit from a bit more description, especially of the main character and setting, but these details could also be filled in with illustration. The story has the timeless feel of an old classic. All in all a very good children's short story which I recommend.
I gave this story a lot of thought before writing this review. I decided that this story does not reach its potential. The fruit tree fable part of the story sounds pretty good, but is lacking. There are some things alluded to, lightly touched upon, which if examined deeper, could really pay off. I think there is a lot of potential in this story, but it remains untapped.
The writing is top notch. The imagery is good. The dialog felt natural. I felt transported, in large part due to the foreign objects and names, but they blended seamlessly into the story. The pace was very good. I wanted to know what was going to happen next! I also became very interested in the central character, which is impressive in such a short story. My only complaint is that the end came abruptly, gave little closure, and felt disconnected from the rest of the story. I intend to read more from this author!
A solid story with good structure and pace. The dialog feels a bit forced at times. I found myself chuckling at some of the modern slang, but it lacked consistency. Also the characters are multi-generational, and different generations should use their own vernacular. The extensive use of modern gadgetry was a clever twist. But over all, it feels like an earlier draft of a better work. It could use some polishing.