I stayed with this short story even though I didn't think it made much sense until the end. And then I don't feel the first ninety percent of the story fit the epilogue that did make sense. The first part read more like a horror story. The editing needs work, not terrible but not good either.
My God! This book is exciting and scary. I loved it. I wonder if cold blooded killers can really be this dangerous and still have ties to normal friends and families as depicted? The scene where Ron Weaver was attacked was intense as it gave his feelings when he was shot and dying. I liked that the assassin isn't perfect, he makes mistakes just like the rest of us. A great read.
One of the best books I've read at Smashwords. It's set in France during WWI in the trenches with the British against the German Army. Great story and characters. And there's a murder mystery in all of that. The writing reminds me of Ken Follett's style.
The first part took some time to introduce the character. Then it was flat out pedal to the metal. How Carter got his name was neat. It's short but I liked it enough to download the second book. The mean guy is really mean and the final scene was great.
This trilogy has more unexpected twist and turns. In the first book I liked Clay, now I 'm learning to fear him and not like him. Somehow he's able to rationalize what he does to others as normal and necessary. What a transition. The last 25 percent was so full of surprises I was in awe. I've bought book three and am ready to start it. A great read.
I couldn't believe it, the pace of this trilogy didn't let up a bit. Boy, did he get even with the mob. The ending was as it had to be and I liked the epilog to close the remaining characters out. Wish there were books four and five instead of just three.
East Coast is a believable yarn but the editing is bad to the point it takes effort to finish it. There are missing and misspelled words, rough sentence structure etc. A professional editor could make this authors work standout.
It's short but a very good yarn. Several flaws, at the beginning Gerber has a dark blue Caddy and at the end he has a red one. Some of what should have been dialog was given as narrative. In my opinion that took away from the story. The editing is very bad. It's a shame because the plot is good.
Cold Comfort is an excellent story and I'm proud to be able to give it a 5.0 rating. The plot is good, the character descriptions are clear and the detective comes off as a well organized 'don't give me any crap' type of person. A good read. And the editing is good.
Wow! Carter is one sexy dude and I like the introduction of Kate. She turned out to be a lot tougher than she started. The prison sequences were great and seemed genuine. Hope to see both of these main characters in future books. I'm waiting for the next one.
A neat little story that could have used more detail in some areas to aid continuity. One in particular was at the end with the stooge named Tony. Yael didn't come across as real, her dialog was stiff. Editing isn't bad but several errors do stand out.
Fate of an Angle is one of those strange books I almost put down several times, but felt compelled to finish. It's certainly not uplifting. The writing is decent and the story is fresh and different. The plot intrigued me and the characters are memorable. Try it.
Glacier Lake is a good story with some flaws. The M.C., Tom Riggins, is out in -28 degree temp. yet drives down a muddy road. If the author used very few contractions to attempt a local dialect all he did was make the dialog stiff and unnatural. The story has a good plot and characters. I liked it even with the flaws. Editing is average for independent authors but certainly not professional.
The pitch is an interesting plot with an interesting MC, if you like mystical characters. At the beginning someone intrudes on the MCs work and he doesn't know who this stranger is or how he was found out. Then the incident is never mentioned again in the story. I felt there was another story there but it was just ignored. Some mention should have been made of the MCs concerns or what he was going to do about it or something. The remainder of the story was a letdown.
I could not get interested in this story. The editing is bad with unnecessary words and repeats. Several times I had to go back and reread to determine which of the two characters were speaking. The main character came off as dumb.
At ten percent the story was full of back story and excessive details. At fifteen percent it hadn't changed except to be repetitious. The editing isn't terrible, but is a long way from good. I quit at fifteen percent.
The Hero is another mystery and detective story I didn't want to stop reading. Character descriptions, plot and editing are very good. The author has created two believable antagonists who are about as bad as you can imagine and a protagonist who wins out by sheer determination. I highly recommend it.
Res is described as a fixer, a vigilante when needed. Apparently everyone knows who he is and what he does, even the cops, which seems absurd. After reading 25% of the story that consisted of nothing but lead in I gave it up because nothing happened.
This story is so overly descriptive it got boring. The author spent eight screens of travelogue descriptions for the main character to get from one location to his destination. I found myself skimming through paragraphs that did nothing but dilute the story until it turned from stew into broth.
Congratulations to the author on a very good read. It's a little wordy and repetitious but the story is strong and the action is plentiful. I especially liked the kick ass attitude of the main character. Editing is good for an indie book but not without errors. I highly recommend it.
This story is interesting but the writing and editing are bad. At times the main character slips back and forth from first person to third person, words are missing, misspelled, extra etc. The writing is stiff, unnatural, wordy and repetitious. Susan comes off as being goofy at times and Tucker acts like an amateur instead of an intelligent experienced cop.
This story is a hidden gem. I loved it, especially the humorous exchanges. The main plot was exciting and the characters are a stretch but almost believable. The good characters are always enjoyable. I'm going to read other books by this author. Now the bad news. The editing is bad but the story carried me past it. Past is a key word. The author needs to use it when it's required and stop making passed carry the whole load.
This collection of short stories is well written, except for the editing. As with the authors other works it needs the help of an editor. I'm a realist and only read the first three shorts. They deal with vampires and monsters and that goofiness doesn't appeal to me. But I do realize other do read and enjoy those subjects. So merely on the strength of the plots and technique I'll give it a 4.
The Return is a light hearted fun to read story. As with Mr. Zazski's other books the editing is very bad, so bad as to drag it from a 5 down to a 4. And that's being generous.
The characters in The Return run from simple to extremely wild. There are some pretty vivid sex scenes including some light S&M sequences. If you don't like that don't read it. The plot is complex and original. Overall I liked it and highly recommend it if you can read over the poor editing and still enjoy the story.
If authors are going to write about guns they MUST learn the basics before incorporating them in stories. There are no automatic pistols, they are semi-automatics. They also use magazines to hold the bullets, not clips.
When Stanton disposed of bodies at sea, he used a refrigerator filled with concrete. A cubic yard of concrete weighs approximately 4,000 lb. or 2 tons. If an average frige holds 1.5 cubic yards it would weigh over 3 tons. It would take a hell of a winch to lift that and pleasure yachts don't have that kind of equipment. Since he only learned of his targets arrival twelve hours earlier he must have been a busy boy to do all the prep as portrayed.
The writer said they were in water so deep only small submarines could reach the bottom. How and why was the boat anchored in such a depth? Doesn't make any sense. Did it have a mile or two of anchor cable?
The editing and sentence structure are bad. The writing is awkward and so confusing as to be a distraction. Lately I've read many novels where the writer doesn't know when to use passed and past. There is a difference, get a dictionary.
Stanton is way over the top. He owns mansions, islands, big yachts and four satellites in space. It's a bit much. He's brilliant and never gets out foxed or injured. He would be more interesting if he weren't so perfect, make him a little more human. There is little tension created because everything goes as planned without flaw. Life isn't like that.
In spite of the deficiencies there is a good story buried here. .
A fine story well told. Characters are well defined, the plot is interesting and there is action aplenty. On the down side the editing is bad, not atrocious but bad enough to be distracting with missing words, incorrect usage and poor sentence structure. And please author learn that automatic weapons use magazines not clips. Cleaned up it would be a 5.0.
This is the future envisioned by the author if the elected morons in the federal and state governments continue to screw up everything they touch. And they will if the stupid voters continue to re-elect them to more terms. It follows a man who inadvertently becomes a hero when the Chinese Army invades the country and he leads the resistance army against them. Editing is decent but not perfect.
This story was exciting from the start and held my rapt attention to the end. Good characters and a purely evil antagonist. Editing is very good but not perfect, not bad enough to be a distraction. As with many writers the author calls the magazine in a semi-automatic weapon a clip, even uses both terms in the same sentence. They are not the same so please do some research and use magazine correctly. The writing is excellent, so even with minor flaws it's a five.
Parts of this plot are far fetched. An eleven million British pound shipment of platinum is at a bullion company and only one guard is at the building. The police are to provide an escort but it can also be only one man. The writing mechanics are weak and editing is terrible. The author constantly mixes past and present tense in the same sentences. The plot is interesting but it needs major help.
Fial McMurrin is an Irishman in the 1800s who plans to retaliate against the British for the beating and brutal murder of his father and the rape and murder of his mother. He takes on the whole British Navy and wins. Then he decides to do good by the black men in his crew. A very well written sea story in that respect. The editing and sentence structure need professional editing. Many sentences are incomplete and hard to interpret.
My biggest complaints are the references to supposed ancestors of Chuck Berry, Muddy Waters and even Barack Obama. I understand what the author was attempting but it didn't work. And whatever possessed the author to highlight a scummy musician who is a sexual pervert. Chuck Berry for years chased young girls in their mid teens and even put hidden cameras in the woman's restrooms of his Missouri restaurant.
Angel, Falling is an okay read, but if all the excessive unrelated descriptions and filler were taken out it would be a short read. I would like to rate it a 3.5 but that's not possible so it gets a 4.0 because it's better than a 3.0. Editing is fair, better than most but still needs work.
My interest in Enigma steadily declined from the start and I quit at 31%. There is too much filler and the author seems to be obsessed with designer labels. She told the designer name, price and location where the article was purchased until it was boring. On my last page Love took off his Austin Reed Donegal jacket after he'd dropped his Samuel Windsor linen jacket at the cleaners but still got away without his Peter Christian navy woollen Reefer. Well lottie da. I couldn't care less. What I do want to know is that he took off his jacket. I don't care that he went to the cleaners or didn't wear his heavy coat. All this does is slow the story down and cause snoring. Kindness gets it a 3.0 rating.
If you like a story with rape, blood, gore and graphic sexual encounters this is your story. The editing is fair, not good by any means but not terrible. Some scenes seem contrived. A young girl is raped by the bad guy's brother and left comatose. She's not in any other scenes but toward the end when the good guy (and that's a stretch) is about to be shot she appears from the dark forest clad only in her slip and with a shovel bashes the antagonist in the head to kill him. Then there's the ending which is totally weird.
The story was good but for me the love scenes were a bit steamy. Overall I enjoyed the interaction between the main characters, the antagonist and the supporting characters. Karolyn's bad choices were apparent the first half of the book until the big confrontation. I liked that she and her husband got back together. The author also handled abortion sensibly and showed the terrible downside of it.
If this was written as a satire it would be acceptable. For a serious story it falls short. The basic plot is okay, but the action scenes are over the top, impossible, improbable and unreal. Another tale of a common man who suddenly turns into a killing machine without conscience or morals. In an instant he is an accomplished killer with knowledge of all the mechanics of killing. Also, the editing is poor and needs lots of work.
The writing of Cashback is wordy and repetitious. I wanted to put it down several times but hoped it would get better. It's a straight line story with little internal conflict to pull the reader in. Editing isn't terrible but the story needs another pass or two to correct blatant errors.