Old Habits
on Dec. 17, 2011
I liked this book but I think it could be tighter. The first person narrative throughout the book becomes tiresome after a while, and it seems like 90 percent of the book is Stoce's internal dialog and lessons about thieving, intersperced with very occasional three-sentence dialogs and action - said action always being described in detail by Stoce's internal dialog, almost always by his homilies on details of the precise tricks of the trade.
I suggest the author consider revising, and having some chapters from other characters' viewpoints. I'd love to hear what's going on with Greaze from his point of view when he's out of Stoce's presence, rather than Stoce either guessing or telling us afterwards. It would be very interesting to know more about the paladin using him as the viewpoint character.
It would also be an improvement to find a way to have the thieving tricks - which are very interesting - described or implied rather than narrated.
Lois McMaster Bujold is a great example of mixing different viewpoint characters, especially in Komarr and A Civil Campaign.
I do like very much that the protagonist actually feels the effects of the various fights that he gets in, although my feeling while reading the last third of the book was that there was no way that he could expend all that energy based on eating a few biscuts here an there. Feed these two, for heaven's sake!