This seemed to start off nicely, but gets rather repetitive after a while. The story isn't always reasonable in my opinion, and there are some annoying punctuation errors.
I've stopped reading at page 177, not sure if i want to continue.
A nice immersive cross-world story, i enjoyed reading this series (read up to book 7).
This is one of those that could have gotten a 5/5 if it weren't for the stylistic (protocolling instead of telling the story - seems to be a common problem with books around here ;)) and the flaws i felt with character-consistency.
This free book is a very nice read indeed, and i agree with the posters before.
That being said, the following parts of this series get worse and worse. I bought them all at once after reading this one, and regret it. The second is till okay i guess, though it feels more like a collection of short stories.
The further you go, the more the author seems to keep events that would have been interesting from the reader. Also the main character seems to have no flaws after a while, which makes things boring. If there ever IS an event he has a hard time with, its not explicitly told, but just mentioned.
There are also too many new people introduced by name, too many name changes, too many all-good-doers for friends and family, and FAR too many people constantly telling how great the main character is. Most of the third book i wanted to scream: Stop the adulation and start the damn adventure!
This starts out as a fantasy story that could go somewhere, and then goes off to test the bounds of absurdity. I'm not sure if this was meant to be epic fantasy or a comedy. You get everything in here - sex-crazed elfs, demons from outer space, gods, unicorns, dragons and so on. It wouldn't be so bad if the main character wasn't so damn perfect, which makes things utterly boring.
Fairly well done, -1 for needing more proofreading, -0.5 for a setup that is a little too familiar.
I still enjoyed this and hope for a sequel.
Untamed Gift (Book One of the Items Trilogy)
on Sep. 24, 2012
I agree with Tam wholeheartedly. Especially the continuous use of the present tense in between took away my immersion. Its a little sad because the story is great.
I found the first few books an enjoyable read, but imho the latter suffer from logic flaws and inconsistent characters, which the whole rebirth theme doesn't help.
I just finished book 7 and the series is also developing a superman syndrome(starting to feel that characters are never in any real danger)
I was enjoying it while reading, the writing is fairly engaging, but
-1 because of plenty of spelling errors
-1 because it felt unfinished, even for a book in a series. No real progress with either the main storyline or the characters and basically ending in something like a cliffhanger (which i personally hate).
I basically liked it, but there are quite a few flaws. I hope a follow-up will give more sense to why things are happening as they are, because at the end of this the background story seems highly non-sensical.
-1 for form (sometimes i think smashwords authors like to dictate their books to their smartphones and never look at it again - there, their - vile, vial - etc.). Also, please don't do the thing where the questionmark isn't at the end of the actual question, it's annoying.
Time travel is difficult by itself i guess, but after having read this through i have the feeling the author also never really knew where she wanted to go with the story.
I was often confused by what was going on, and moreover why it was going on, and the rather weak ending didn't provide any enlightenment. I especially see no real "point to the story".
Now i am not a native speaker, and so i may have missed a few clues to make sense of it all, but usually i have no problems in that regard.