The writing is really juvenile. Grammar is severly lacking. Lots of run on sentances and missing punctuation. Examples:
"I ponder what the future will hold and can't help
but be angry. How could she sell my freedom to some
stranger I don't know. What will become of me, what is
He going to want to do to me, what if.... I dared not
continue thinking that way. I would just have to hope
that my virtue would never be taken against my will. I
fell on my bed crying until I fell asleep."
If he is a stranger- then the 'I dont know' is implied. Crossing out unnecessary words is something every English teacher I ever had liked to do to my papers. Also, Very few people actively equate virginity with virtue anymore. I think the other reviewer got the nail on the head when she said that Elizabeth acts like an 11 yr old for most of the book.
"I smiled at her and said “Good morning Momma, you shouldn't have slept in that chair it can't be good for you, and I am sorry for how I reacted yesterday I know that you were only trying to make sure I was taken care of. I will be ready to go whenever you are and I will do as I'm told no matter what. I will make you proud, Momma.” Mother smiled weakly and told me, “You are such a good girl I didn't want to do this but with no other options I had to make sure that you were taken care of above anything else."
Elizabeth takes the changes so passively that she doesnt seem like a real person. And what 18 yr old talks to her mother like that- to me it implied such extreme sheltering way beyond even the Amish that I cant picture that mother then selling her child as a sex slave.
Hmmm... I should find an example that doesnt occur in the first few pages...yeah, sorry, I couldnt find something clean enough to post. Its a book about a girl getting used and abused by "daddy" and his friends. Yes, abused- she didnt chose to enter the situation therefore its abuse. No romance. Its not even erotic.
My impressions of this book: poorly written, appalling, its not so much a story as the author's fantasy, I may never use the word "sass" again.
If you are researching what to expect if you want to try this lifestyle, yeah, not even then would I recommend this book.
(review of free book)