I really enjoyed this story and the character that was injected into it. The world felt well crafted, and the story was intriguing and believable, as a whole presenting a snapshot of a world that it'd be interesting to see more of.
My only real issue with it is the ending, which felt a little anticlimactic. Not because of what it was, as the actual events themselves felt perfect; but rather because of the way the events were presented as what is GOING to happen, rather than the events actually happening. As foreshadowing, if the outcome wasn't certain I think this would have worked to provide tension; but presented as a definite conclusion to the tale, I think it lacks immediacy and punch.
However, that's a style issue, not a storytelling one, and the story's conclusion is still satisfying and believable. The whole piece was well crafted and very easy to read, and I'm looking forward to trying more of the author's works.
(review of free book)