on Feb. 20, 2018 :
The beginning of this story was difficult to get into. Its poor formatting and lack of editing was frustrating. Everything is dialogue until page 3, when the author finally bothers to tell us they're on an airplane.
I did read it on the Smashwords reader which might have something to do with the formatting, though.
But the story gradually gets better. Flashbacks show the characters during happier times and the author writes beautiful descriptions, even though there's not enough of them to immerse the reader fully into the story.
The story shifts from flashback to present, from inner dialogue to action very well. I never felt bogged down in description, nor did I get impatient for a flashback to end, which I do with a lot of stories.
But the story ends abruptly, and while the main character gets closure, the reader certainly doesn't. So while this story has a few redeeming qualities, overall it is an amateurish work from someone who could be a great writer with a lot more time and practice.
(review of free book)