Jason J. Cross is an independent filmmaker, animator and author. Most of his work can be seen on www.fsocross.com as well as on youtube.
on Feb. 16, 2013 :
Interesting premise - poor execution.
The grammatical errors (singular vs. plural, verb tenses, coordinating parallelism) start before the short story begins and continues through the "about the author" section at the end. All of this was distracting during the reading experience.
The storyline is contrived with the use of too many character perspectives - including a bartender's two sentence thoughts - for such a short story. The "surprise" at the end is a cheat because of the multiple perspectives.
In a short story (especially) every word is important. The reader is provided with far too much detail on the bar setting which is completely irrelevant to the plot. Descriptions of people are vague and actually non-existent for the main character - Julie. Elements are introduced (motel, train station) which the reader must just accept as they are never elaborated on.
The details of the cover are hard to see as it is so dark.
(reviewed 7 days after purchase)