I kinda dig being the fly on the wall. In the case of this story, I seem to have flown into the story after the characters had already gotten involved with each other. I did find Michelle very appealing though. Fun distraction.
Dull and unerotic. Simply getting to the sex without any character development or setting description is simply dull. It reads like it was written by some eighteen year old without any understanding of sensuality. Fine to get to the hardcore stuff but do it slowly and with some thought.