on Dec. 7, 2010 :
I couldn't put this book down and now that I'm done with it I can't stop thinking about it. Could any of this really be true? this book pulled on all my emotional strings and it really makes you think about our existence here. I know it's fiction but wow, I need to find out more about this Hopi tribe. What a read!
(reviewed the day of purchase)
on Oct. 9, 2010 :
"The answers to most of our questions have always been there, but our failure to connect the dots could mean the destruction of the human race."
In this thrilling ride reminiscent of Dan Brown's "The Da Vinci Code," we are taken on a journey of epic proportions to find the truth of our existence here on Earth; a truth that speaks to our past and future, and a truth that may not be easy or safe for anyone to uncover. This fictional novel is founded in the Hopi prophecy, shared with the world during the Hopi address to the United Nations in 1992. With its basis in actual events, this story is both fascinating and eye-opening; just the kind of story I love to read! I could really see this book turned into an exciting movie and, more importantly, I could see this book opening people up to the idea of truth in the Hopi prophecy.
With all the potential this book has, I would like to see it go through a serious editing process. Although I wanted to be completely engaged in this story, it was difficult to look past the mechanics of the writing style. There are numerous examples throughout the story. Most distracting to me, however, was the inappropriate use of commas (or lack thereof). Commas were sometimes missing, most notably when someone was addressed in conversation. There were also commas inappropriately placed in ways that broke up the cadence of the sentence, perhaps changing the intended meaning, and rendering the sentence incorrect. I generally look past the occasional typo or grammatical error (I am certainly not a professional proofreader), but there were enough of these errors, on almost every page, to distract me from fully engaging and enjoying the great storyline.
At first, I was also distracted by the very short chapters (some are only a paragraph long). This is a style preference, and I did get used to the varying chapter length as the story went on. I was, however, thinking that having longer chapters in the beginning and progressively shortening to match the increased pace of the impending climax may better match the pacing of the book. There was a general abruptness to some of the chapters that could have been avoided with additional context. Additionally, because of the long paragraphs and the failure to begin a new paragraph when a new person speaks, I sometimes found it really difficult to tell who was doing the speaking. This led to some general confusion for me during some of the action scenes.
A thorough editing and some additional revising to polish the writing would add variety and a little more "voice," and could turn this fantastic storyline into a bestseller. I would give the storyline 5 stars and the writing 2 stars, which averages out to 3.5 stars. All in all, a fun and adventurous read with great potential!
(reviewed 6 days after purchase)
on Aug. 3, 2010 :
I just finished this book and was really impressed. I would highly suggest reading this and I promise you will not regret it. A true page turner this book is impossible to put down and is extremely well written. It is certainly a book for everyone as it has mystery, romance and really does make you think about life as you know it. I could see this book making waves in the publishing world soon. Enjoy!
(reviewed 28 days after purchase)