The first thing that caught my attention, as is often the case, is the cover image. When it comes to romance, I have a particular affinity for the color red (it features prominently in my own work). The cover image does an excellent job representing the nature of the story, and the one word I would use to describe that is _sexy._ It simmers from the beginning to the end, and that's one of the things I appreciate most about this story: it doesn't waste any time doddling before getting to full speed.
Despite the positive things I have to say about it, there is a real reason I had to knock one star off of my review, and that is because of the grammar and punctuation. There's no getting around it—numerous mistakes lurk within these pages. Normally, I would look the other way when it comes to stuff like this, but when the problem is this apparent, it becomes very obvious that some effort is lacking.
Nevertheless, as a whole, this story is quite good. Clearly, a lot of effort was put into the actual content, but I can't emphasize it enough—attention to detail is absolutely critical. Everything from content to formatting to spelling, punctuation, and grammar all weigh heavily when it comes to a story's quality. It's the little things that make a book, and if correcting the mechanical mistakes in this story is what it would take to make it shine, I would be willing to go through it personally just to make that happen.
(review of free book)