Pack Law

Adult
Rated 3.13/5 based on 17 reviews
Every werewolf community has to have laws in place to protect them from the humans and the humans from the werewolves. More

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Language: English
ISBN: 9781452451138
About Marie Stephens

I am a Registered Respiratory Therapist by profession and now trying my hand at writing. I have always loved the paranormal and things that go bump in the night. I want to bring my brand of characters to light for my readers to enjoy. I have recently changed my writing style. I hope everyone enjoys the books.

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Reviews

Review by: Future Slayer Girl (aka kitten) on Aug. 19, 2013 :
This is the first time I am very unhappy to rate a book a one star. I probably shouldn't--the author put this story out there for people to review--therefore, she sort of has to stand up to what is going to come of it.

Yes, I saw some good reviews for this book. I was inclined to believe that they dismissed the really terrible grammar, spelling errors, and poor plot developments, and just thought about what the story could be.

I could have done that.

The story had a form of potential.

Right now I felt like it was a first draft that the author had put out for all of us to beta read. Or I felt like we all got ARC copies in the Paranormal group. Then I realized I had gotten this off smashwords so it was in fact a published version of this story.

I have to say that if I properly wrote this review, it would be attached with a fully critiqued copy of the book in an email after it. As I was reading I was literally rewriting the stilted dialogue. I was slashing out whole sentences that literally mirrored the sentence before it that just made it all seem that much more juvenile. This story has potential. HUGE even. It needs an editor and a proofreader really really bad!

It could also benefit from being beta read and or critiqued before it goes to an editor. The plot flow was jarring. It didn't flow and it shoved you into one scene then the other, than back again. The characters had no dimensional value, so it was very hard to connect with any of them.

I honestly contemplated not rating this book. It was just NOT READY to be published. However, the author put the book up for reviews and it is officially published, therefore it needs the rating. I feel bad because the story didn't make me angry, I was just hurting while I read it. Each sentence I cringed and wondering WHY? Yes, just why?

I suggest pulling the version available now, grabbing up a few beta readers that will help with plot flow, some sentence structure, and solidifying the story line. The story is there, the idea is hovering, but it got lost in a sea of amateurish mistakes.

*I received a copy of this book via Lovers of Paranormal romance on behalf of the author in exchange for an honest review**
(reviewed within a week of purchase)

Review by: Lynn Reynolds on Aug. 16, 2013 :
I received this book for review from the author and the Lovers of Paranomal (a GoodReads group). I was not compensated nor was I required to write a positive review. The opinions I have expressed are my own.

This is told in the first person but it’s like Ava is speaking directly to the reader.

This story revolves around the full moon and what happens in the emergency room. As the caretaker of a parent, I can truly attest to what goes on in the emergency room at that time of month – it’s also true in a nursing home.

Ava Lingham is the Respitory Therapist at the hospital. Tristan was brought into the ER not quite feeling like himself. And the action begins right from the first chapter. There’s an escape that’s involved. Ava also gets to meet Zane and Christian. Then things get really interesting from there. I had no choice but to continue reading until I got to the end and then I wished it would continue.

If you want to know what happens with Ava, Tristan, Zane and Christian you will just have to get the book. It is a quick read that you could get done in just a matter of hours. The books is very sexy – what do you expect with all that man material on the pages. It will also have you looking forward to the next book Pack Law: The Awakening that came out this past December.
(reviewed within a month of purchase)

Review by: sal654 on Aug. 15, 2013 :
I requested Pack Law for read and review because I felt the synopsis has such potential and definitely pushed my oh-boy let's read this one button. Unfortunately, as much as I wanted to like this book, it just fell short. The storyline has great potential, but the execution is just poorly done. I feel this read definitely needs to go back to the drawing board and editing table. I did like some of these characters and I would like to see them shine rather than just go through the motions of a poorly done formula read. I requested this book for read and review from the author and received it with a request for my honest review without any compensation whatsoever, other than the joy of reading a new book
(reviewed within a month of purchase)

Review by: Anna M on Aug. 14, 2013 :
**I received this book in exchange for an honest review, Lovers of Paranormal.**

This book was a potentially great idea and a great concept but it was marred by so many grammatical errors and more importantly POV errors, that just could not enjoy it as I should have.

There is something to be said when in the first sentence of an entire book, there is a word missing...I mean it's really hard to overlook that big of an error. So that was my first impression of the book.

In regards to the story line...I mean it had the potential to be great...the idea was exciting, the heat could have been great...but then Stephens felt the need to rush everything. So it felt like it should have been a 300 page book but it was sliced and diced to become a shorter story...but it was cut in all the wrong places, there felt like so many details that were missing, it effected the connection between the characters and effected the flow.

My biggest concern however is the switching of the P.O.V.s. Sometimes from one sentence to the next we would switch from one P.O.V. to another all within the same paragraph. Or Stephens would switch tenses and it was the MOST confusing P.O.V.s that I've EVER encountered, and that was why I dropped the rating down like I did...it was just too much of a mess to even explain. Unfortunately I wasn't an English major or a grammar guru, so I don't know the exact wording for this issue, but trust me, it was an issue.


I left it at a 2 rating because I kind of like where it could have gone, it really could have been a great book....so for it's potential, it hovers between a 2 and a 2.5.
(reviewed within a week of purchase)

Review by: Kay Griffiths on Aug. 13, 2013 :
I received this book in exchange for an honest review, LoP, goodreads.
I enjoyed this book, the story keeps you reading whenever you have a spare five minutes and makes you want another five on top. Although I enjoyed it, it always irritates me when reading this type of book where the 'damsel' meets the mystery man, has sex the next day and is mated by day number 3. I mean, it kinda makes the woman in these books either look seriously needy or darn right loose. Which is never good. The characters are good, some more than others. Even though it was a very short appearance I really liked the character of Lance :) very sweet. I would have really enjoyed slapping the character of Tara and the same for Michael. I do like a happy ending though, and this really did have one :)
(reviewed within a month of purchase)

Review by: Kristy Atkinson on Aug. 12, 2013 :
2.5 stars

I was given a copy of this book for an honest review (LoP).

I'm not going to write a synopsis, as there are plenty of those written already, and there's not a whole lot of book to summarise. This was a quick read. The actual story line was okay. Nothing very original, but not too bad, and it had a nice cover. The execution however, was quite poor. There were frequent typos, grammatical errors, changes in tense and POV, and a lack of punctuation, which made it extremely frustrating to read. There were also many things that just didn't make sense and/or were totally superfluous and the writing was simple and disorganised.

I really wanted to like this, and I hate to post negative sounding reviews, but I struggled to find many positives. I really only finished it so that I could write an honest review.
(reviewed within a month of purchase)

Review by: Heather Busby on Aug. 10, 2013 :
*I received a copy of this book for free from LOP in exchange for my honest review*

From the beginning I was completely entranced by this fast pace love story. Ava who is a respiratory therapist at a local ER, gets kidnapped by the very man she is trying to save. Tristan is a werewolf who has been shot with silver coated bullets, and is in a race for his life. So Tristan carries Ava out with him to travel back to the pack's home, to remove the bullets out of his body so that he can heal. During her meeting and short stay with Tristan, she finds herself drawn to him and wanting him. All I can say is that this story was so freaking hot, I had to wipe the drool off my chin. The only thing I wish is that I could've had a more in-depth with the characters, so I could understand them better. All in all this book rocked, I absolutely loved it!
(reviewed within a week of purchase)

Review by: Joselyn Raquel Moreno Burke on Aug. 09, 2013 :
I was given this book in exchange for an honest review for LoP

Fun and intesting to read, a lot of drama and romance with a tint of good fun in the way.

i liked the characters and the situations they're in are so funny sometimes, it was easy to read and feel the characters and the plot.

the perfect lite reading in shapeshifter themes.
(reviewed within a week of purchase)

Review by: Debbie Cole on Aug. 08, 2013 :
Pack Law is your garden variety woman-meets-shapeshifter novel. The premise was great, and it got rolling quite quickly (only 35 pages long!). I did find the story to echo so many other paranormal romances ive read recently (notably some J.R. Ward?) but I enjoyed the basic story Stephens tried to develop. The characters were obviously shallow with so little time to develop them, but she still managed to get them into two dimensions, although I found Ava changed her mind about our "hero" very VERY suddenly (like a line separates the decision and its very arbitrary).

I would have enjoyed the story more with more fleshing out, and perhaps more editing. I had a hard time reading this just because it needed some serious editing. I do feel that with time Stephens could have something legitimately publishable with some editing and depth. A great start to a fantastic novel with some hammering and tweaking.
(reviewed within a week of purchase)

Review by: Starla Young on Aug. 07, 2013 :
I really enjoyed this book. I loved Ava and her ability to stay strong even when things were horribly wrong. Tristan was a true alpha but still was able to show his feelings to Ava. I could literally feel the character of Michael, he gave me chills at times. I loved the twists in the storyline that I did not see coming. I am looking forward to reading the next book in the series. Marie Stephens has a wonderful gift for keeping you into the story. I could not stop reading until I knew what was happening with Ava and Tristan. I received this book in exchange for an honest review (LoP or Lovers of Paranormal). I am going to recommend this book to my paranormal reading friends, and maybe some who want to try something new. ;)
(reviewed within a week of purchase)

Review by: Jen G on Feb. 14, 2013 :
I think the book has promise but could not finish it due to writing style. No paragraphs, quotes, sentence structure was off at times. Made it difficult to read. Clean it up some and I will be happy to give it another try.
(review of free book)

Review by: Pamela Jenewein on Feb. 09, 2013 :
Smashwords freebie

WOW! The story begins beautifully and it’s relatively well written however… where is the proper dialog formatting? It’s crammed inside the descriptive paragraphs, making for a very hard and engaging read. Continuing the read, its like I’m reading an essay instead of erotic romance fiction. Adding to this disappointment, the story flip-flops between First and Third Person, dashing my Saturday plans in reading a cool erotic paranormal.

With the previous positive reviews, I’m wondering if the PDF version, which I downloaded, is flawed.
(review of free book)

Review by: Pamela Jenewein on Feb. 09, 2013 : (no rating)
Smashwords freebie

WOW! The story begins beautifully and it’s relatively well written however… where is the proper dialog formatting? It’s crammed inside the descriptive paragraphs, making for a very hard and engaging read. Continuing the read, its like I’m reading an essay instead of erotic romance fiction. Adding to this disappointment, the story flip-flops between First and Third Person, dashing my Saturday plans in reading a cool erotic paranormal.

With the previous positive reviews, I’m wondering if the PDF version, which I downloaded, is flawed.
(review of free book)

Review by: Melissa Poole on Aug. 18, 2012 :
Love the plot. Very hot scenes .
(reviewed within a week of purchase)

Review by: JANET CALDWELL on Aug. 17, 2012 :
I give this book a 5 star. Bring it on. Janet Caldwell
(reviewed the day of purchase)

Review by: Robert Stephens on Aug. 14, 2012 :
I enjoyed the book and the plot. I look foward to more.
(reviewed the day of purchase)

Review by: Robert Stephens on Aug. 14, 2012 :
I liked the plot of the book and the story. I look foward to reading more
(reviewed the day of purchase)

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