The plot was a very tried-and-true formula: Sexy billionaire suddenly finds himself in charge of small child. Sexy billionaire hires nanny to care for small child. Nanny and child develop special bond, while sexy billionnaire and nanny develop the hots for each other. All ends as you might expect it to end.
Despite it being such a predictable plot, in the hands of a good writer it could be something fresh and special. This author writes well in terms of language, but character development and pacing is slightly lacking. For example, we are allowed to see Celine's internal dialogue where she's attracted to Pierce and then later when she realises she's fallen for him. But on Pierce's side, we don't get to see that moment when he realises he's in love with her. The author skipped that part. We go from "She's so hot" to "I can't live without you" with nothing in between. Another example was when Pierce decides to take Kylie and Celine on a trip to visit Celine's family in France, because "You've talked so much about Marc and Sylvan (Celine's younger brothers) that I feel I almost know them". Really? Where were all those conversations? From what I understood, he's only around on weekends, and during that time Kylie is always present. When did they have personal conversations about her family?
The scene with Pierce and the kitten was jarring and totally unnecessary. If the author wanted to show Pierce as a vulnerable human being, it could've been done in, oh, probably at least ten different ways that would have fit the story better. Similarly, the abrupt way Celine decides to leave Pierce's employ (and her reason for it) is kind of silly.
Furthermore, if Pierce realised he's in love with Celine, why did he not pursue her? He seems to have made no effort to stay in contact with her or to persuade her to change her mind when she insists on leaving his employ. It's only when she goes back to see Kylie that he suddenly tells her how he feels.
It seemed like the whole thing with Sophia (the requisite unpleasant, possessive, delusional Other Woman) fizzled out. Firstly, she's a complete caricature as we're never told exactly why she behaves so possessively about Pierce. Does she really care for him, or does she only want him for his money, what?? It's like she's not a real person, she's just there because the author needed to throw a spanner into the works and make Celine feel insecure. Secondly, when Celine tells Pierce about Sophia's behaviour, we never see him confronting Sophia or setting her straight. So it's not clear to the reader whether Sophia ever realises that her hopes and dreams in his direction are totally futile. Thirdly, I fully expected Sophia to be the one behind The Climatic Incident, but the way her role in it was unveiled seemed like an afterthought. It was revealed in the epilogue, sort of like the author realised, oh, people are going to wonder! Let's tie this loose end up! I actually expected Pierce to find out what had happened and then go after Celine and tell her the truth, and persuade her to come back. Fourthly, not only did this not happen, in the reunion scene when Celine comes back to visit Kylie, Sophia opens the door, and then Kylie runs out, starts calling Celine "mommy" and Pierce proposes. I was like, where is Sophia when all this is going on, and what is she doing? Why does she not try to stop it? It was like the author forgot all about Sophia and forgot she was present. Finally, in the epilogue Sophia suddenly does a 180-degree turn and becomes not only human, but friendly enough to be a big help to Celine in the wedding preparations. That was completely out of character and unbelievable. There's nothing to explain this sudden about-turn, and if I were Celine I'd never have trusted in a single piece of advice Sophia were to give me about my wedding!
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