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I write thrillers and mysteries, with a little bit of romance, of course.
The Scorpian Visitant is an epic fantasy / mystery novel in which sixties teenagers Robbie Higgins and Louise Carlton travel to medieval Oakwood to find the Death Stone of Izar. On their fantastic Odyssey they find love and the reality of their mysterious origins.
The Brent Street Haunting is my second novel and was published in October 2013. It is a paranormal story of revenge and murder. Mr. Coates a self-styled African witchdoctor is hell bent on getting even with those he sees responsible for his death, whilst Evangeline Weekes takes the law into her own hands to serve brutal justice on corrupt and predatory members of the establishment. Through one disadvantaged boy Coates and Evangeline are inextricably connected.
My third novel is set in the fictional Deep South city of Duisburg. It is a white knuckle ride of a thriller which finds the evil Mr. Coates in league with a sadistic killer of young women to bring his plans to fruition. Amy Simms is a junior reporter on The Duisburg Star and is obsessed with hunky businessman Jake Webster. Only trouble is Jake is married to her best friend. Amy and Jake ride a rollercoaster of sex, blackmail and murder to stand together against the monstrous Coates. The draft of Duisburg Star was completed early July 2013. I have put it away and expect to publish it in January 2014.
My fourth novel "Amanda" is drafted at 105k words. It a dark thriller about a female sex-killer who is relentlessly manipulated to do her half sister's dirty work. Expect this to be published in the Spring 2014. I am currently working on a sequel to Amanda.
I also write short stories and have published several mysteries including Switch, Vacant Possession, You’ll Never Walk Alone, Double, and the Lucy Harlow crime stories featuring Oxygen Restriction, TV Torment, Opera Flowers and Northern Star.
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on Oct. 03, 2012 :
It's just not ready for prime time. There's a germ of a decent story here: detective is hired to find evidence of affair, but finds something much more sinister. A classic plotline, really--and nothing wrong with that. it's just that the execution is seriously problematic.
First problem: beyond her function as detective, we are given zero insight into Lucy's character. She's just a placeholder. What does *she* think about opera, for example? Detective stories are about detectives, as people, and this one doesn't make Lucy a real person.
Second problem: show, don't tell. Lucy draws conclusions from her environment; but most of these are conclusions *we* should draw from what Lucy sees. Either give us Lucy's conclusions or let us draw our own--but don't do both.
Third problem: editing and punctuation. It's just all over the place. Homophone word choices, lack of commas when needed, malapropisms such as "think the worse" of someone rather than "think the worst," etc. Try reading the story aloud to get the cadence of speech right.
Fourth problem: much, much too long in all the wrong places. The first chapter is at least twice as long--really, more than that--as it needs to be. We need to know a few pieces of information: Stella is a tough 40yo wife trying to save her marriage, her husband runs a chemical company, she thinks he's cheating because he bought flowers, Lucy takes the job. All of this could be done in two of 48 pages, but it takes six--and it still doesn't tell us anything about Lucy. Throughout the story, there's way too much text used up with social business.
To Mr. Moon's credit, once the action part of the story gets going, it's much better. It's just that the setup and the initial investigation need to be cut way down and thoroughly re-edited. And we really need a sense of who Lucy is, if we're to root for her.
(review of free book)