on Oct. 7, 2012 :
I suspect that the author of this piece may be very young -certainly the writing seems to lack any maturity. The plot is quite simple and could be more suspenseful and frightening, but I have to be honest and say the narrative is tedious and boring. The first three chapters contribute virtually nothing to the story, the author's prose is bland, too often repeating words in consecutive sentences and the descriptions lack vibrancy. There are so many
commercial brand names dropped into the text that you wonder if the author is taking sponsorships.
The text contains numerous faults too - puntuation errors, typos and even a few instances of one character's name being used when it should be another's.
There are glimpses of good writing in this, and the dialogue is actually okay (if sparse) but this story could have been told far more effectively in half the length.
(review of free book)