MB Mulhall is an author and a budding photographer. When she’s not pecking away at her keyboard or looking at the world up close through her lens, she’s got her nose stuck in a book. A Jersey girl, born and bred, she spends much of her time scouring the boardwalks for images to capture and conversations to overhear. MB dreams of filling her bookshelves with her own work and of decorating her walls with photographs she’s taken from places around the world.
on Oct. 10, 2012 :
I liked the unique idea of this story, but I found it hard to get through. It's told from the teenaged character's point of view, but it's very inconsistent and full of thoughts that interfere with the story. As an example, the character hints that they have broken a mirror before the reader has any idea that one even exists in what we are first led to believe is an empty hallway. It really helps the reader if internal thoughts are put in italics because it makes it easier to distinguish it from the story. I feel like this story could use quite a bit of editing to bring out the sense of horror and fear that the author intends with more focus on showing rather than telling.
(review of free book)