An Honest Mistake: A Humor Tale

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Two sisters Heather and Sara Donavan are happily preparing for the holidays.
With both of their parents gone for the afternoon to complete some shopping, the sisters are wrapping gifts, listening to music, eating treats and playing with their adorable new puppy named Daley.
Soon, Heather and Sara's holiday celebration is interrupted by the arrival of their obnoxious older brother named Oliver.

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Published: Nov. 21, 2012
Words: 7,490
Language: English
ISBN: 9781301238521
About Amanda Lawrence Auverigne

Amanda Lawrence Auverigne writes horror, humor and dark fantasy fiction.

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Review by: norma peruzzotti on Jan. 24, 2013 : star star
Is a short story that can become a promising short novel.It has some good moments during the plot, but obviously needs more work on it.
The characters need more definition, specifically the mother and the brother.
I had the feeling that there was a puzzle somewhere and this was one of the pieces.So it felt like a cut from something bigger.
I insist: need more work and can become a good one
(reviewed long after purchase)

Review by: olena protsiv on Jan. 23, 2013 : star
I haven't read a short story in a long time and when I saw this on Library Thing, I thought I'd give it a try to see where it goes. It sounded entertaining as well as a fun read.

I did not enjoy this short story at all. It was listed as humour, however, there weren't that many funny parts there. I think that this story has a lot of potential, but it needs to be revised and it would be a good story. The writing style does take away from the story and it was a struggle to continue.

One of the things that really bogged down the story was the descriptions at the beginning and throughout the story. It just came out as details, and not as details that added to the story to make it more interesting. The plot concept was interesting, however, there needs to be more action involved. It just seemed as though there were a lot of details and before you blinked the story was finished. The story left a lot of things unanswered and it made me, the reader, unsatisfied.

I received this book free from the author to review from Library Thing Member Giveaway.
(reviewed long after purchase)

Review by: Melanie Naugler on Jan. 19, 2013 : star
a bit to young a read for me, reminded me of reading a high school assignment . may have enjoyed reading this more when i was 13.
(reviewed within a month of purchase)

Review by: Lorrie Palmer on Jan. 17, 2013 : star
I didn't find the humor in the story and found the dialog to be very stilted. And thought the disgust the brother showed in eating the dog biscuits was pretty over the top. I encourage the author to keep trying and to take a writing course where fellow authors can help her hone her craft and to give her honest feedback.
(reviewed within a month of purchase)

Review by: marty castelao on Jan. 13, 2013 : star
This was by far a very unlikable and not funny story. I got it free to do a review and thank goodness it was very short. While it was over the top on detail, all the fun of what could be of interest was just not there.
(reviewed within a month of purchase)

Review by: Brit Suttell on Jan. 13, 2013 : star star
Unfortunately, this book was not very enjoyable. I think if the story had been any longer I probably would have given up on it. The story is about two sisters and their older brother. The male character is shown as a meat-head and jerk, which annoyed me. The author's attempt at writing in "teen-speak" also failed; none of the teenagers I deal with (which is a fair amount since I live at a boarding school) talk how the author portrayed them. Overall, I was very disappointed.
(reviewed within a month of purchase)

Review by: iampeachy on Jan. 12, 2013 : star star star
A cute, funny story of what family and holidays are known for, sibling antics. Well done!
(reviewed within a month of purchase)

Review by: Melanie Naugler on Jan. 09, 2013 : star
a bit to young a read for me, reminded me of reading a high school assignment . may have enjoyed reading this more when i was 13.
(reviewed within a month of purchase)

Review by: Christine Sundberg on Dec. 28, 2012 : (no rating)
I'm sorry, but I found no humor in this story at all. It at times was confusing. A page and 1/2 of description to set the scene was overboard. It filled my mind with the picture of two teenage girls wrapping gifts, then they are talking with their mother about buying bourbon and vodka? How old are these girls? Daley was thrown in the mix on pg 19 with no previous mention so I had to keep reading to find out it was the dog. The part that was obviously supposed to be the humor, the eating of the dog cookies, came across as a sibling argument because of the name-calling and indifference. Sorry, I did not care for it...I feel sorry for this family.
(reviewed the day of purchase)

Review by: Eleonora A. on Dec. 24, 2012 : (no rating)
I didn't like it at all and I'm sorry to say it because it seemed promising. I didn't understand it at all and could not find any humor in it...
(reviewed the day of purchase)

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