on March 03, 2013 :
The plot was really interesting. I think the writer could have done so much with this plot and I really encourage them to consider fleshing out the characters and the plot a bit more. It would make the story much more emotionally impacting, and I think it has great potential to be a much longer story. There were a few grammar mistakes but other than that, I really enjoyed reading this.
(review of free book)