After looking at my original review again, I think I was a bit too harsh, so here's a re-done version:
The main problem I have with the story is the awkward phrasing and poor grammar. However, I think a good editor could fix that up no problem. The real issue with the language is that, being used to proper grammar and better phrasing, I could hardly stand to read it. I think that skewed my opinion of the book.
Otherwise, the only real problems were the use of too many cliches and some bits that didn't make sense. I'm fine with the occasional cliche, but when there are as many as in this book, that's where I have a problem. Not making sense... that's never good, but again, is quite fixable. Let me throw out a few of the cliches I had problems with.
The first is the (arguably) most common cliche seen in stories--the strikingly beautiful main character(s) (though the completely ordinary ones are gaining in popularity. Although that's more often than not just used in romance novels so you can connect with the main character... But the guy is always gorgeous). Chassie and her best friend are just too unbelievable. They are drop-dead gorgeous, neither notice or care that other people stare at them for their beauty, and they both have noteworthy eyes. That's several appearance cliches all rolled into one. But they continue.
There's also the whole prophecy bit. Add to that the whole unbelievably-talented-mastering-skills-in-a-matter-of-days thing and you've got problems. I'm just really, really tired of cliches. There are more that I'm not going to bother mentioning, but you get the idea.
As for not making sense, the main problem I had was with the fact that Chassie is surrounded by people who know what she is, but nobody bothers to tell her until her 16th birthday, and even then, not until she's totally freaked herself out with her ability. There were other instances, but that was the main one. I understand that her father didn't want to tell her anything, but with the sheer number of people who thought keeping her ignorant was a bad idea, I'd have thought SOMEONE would've spilled the beans. Especially when she's the subject of a prophecy.
For all of the problems I have with the book, the idea is really quite good. The whole clan thing is totally interesting and the plot as a whole has some potential. I set out to read this book as just that--a published, polished, finished book, but what I got just wasn't quite up to par. I think this book would best be regarded as a rough draft. One with a lot of potential, but needing a lot of editing. So my rating of the book is based on my standards for a finished, polished piece, not on the idea itself. I think it would be misleading to rate it as high as other, well-edited books I've read.
(reviewed 4 days after purchase)