on March 23, 2013 :
That was a poor one.
Idea: Very old, very much used in movies and writing. (Rating: 3/10)
Storytelling: Not entirely bad but somehow repetitive and / or redundant. The story is too short to allow repetitions. The descriptions lack very much in originality, as this fragment shows: “The creatures were diminutive in size but had unusually large heads and bulging red glowing eyes. Their bodies were covered by some type of metallic armor, they communicated without words, somehow telepathically mind to mind. They worked quickly exploring Willie’s body with electronic probes of some sort. Willie was not harmed, not yet at least, but that would change as the procedure continued.” See what I mean? Flat, redundant and banal. (Rating: 5/10)
Personages: cartoons. It is true that the short story telling does not allow lots of space for developing full ranges of emotions, but I could not sympathize with none in this story: Willie is passive, the guards are passive; the dogs are the best. For me, seemed like AI driven characters in an old computer game (Warcraft I, maybe). (Rating: 4/10)
Conclusion: although I hate (I really do) the contemptuous comments like “waste of time,” as being generally too though and ungrateful on writer’s effort, this time I have to advert you: find something better to do (read).
Final rating: 4/10
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