on July 15, 2013 :
My Review of: The Strange Story of Rockette Rabbit
By Sharon Black
Ron, I did enjoy your story very much. My comments follow and describe what I found important to me as the reader. I hope that you find them constructive.
You cleverly introduce Rockette, early on in the story and make her “special” by describing her as the biggest and most alert of the litter. You then clearly described how Rockette met Ricket, the other main character of the story.
The reader’s attention is captured early on and is held throughout the story. The plot while detailed moves quickly to hold the reader’s interest. At times I couldn’t read fast enough to learn the outcome of an incident. The techniques you use throughout the story are most effective in making the reader anxious to read on.
You have targeted this story for children 6 to 11. I believe it to be educational to both rural and urban readers and readily lead to further questions and discussion to learn/teach more. For example:
• What horses are fed and how they are measured, you describe “animal instinct” and the “law of energy in motion” and you describe how horse races are won.
• You describe fear as being a formula for failure, how practice can lead to not only success but also increase one’s self esteem and confidence, the value in helping others and the power of teamwork in meeting a goal.
• You provide examples of how to overcome life problems and the value of determination.
• This story teaches to look at the positives in others and not only the negatives as in describing Ricket’s assets.
• It describes attributes that are not desirable and the danger of misjudging others.
These are all very important lessons for the young reader.
This story stirred up various emotions: happiness, excitement, sadness, fright, hope and pride, to name a few. At times, the description was so vivid it brought tears to my eyes. Your analogy comparing Rockette’s admiration of Ricket’s achievement to a teacher’s pride of a pupil making sense of a lesson was so appropriate to the target reader.
At the end of the story the reader is left wondering if Ricket continued to win medals. Without the author making specific note of it he effectively leaves the reader thinking it through and concluding that he did.
Your writing created visions in the mind’s eye right from the start. These visions were vivid while creating a calming feeling consistent with what one would expect in a rural setting. This created a sense of realism that you carried through the paragraphs and chapters that followed. Believable? A rabbit can knock over a horse? The prior events you described made this incident believable. This same technique is used to lead the reader to believe your story that “…born the legend of the LUCKY RABBIT’S FOOT”.
Well done Ron and thanks for sharing this story with me.
(reviewed 43 days after purchase)