Melody Hindberg grew up in a small town and currently lives with her mother, father, two dogs, cat and guinea pig. She loves spending time with friends and her dog. Some of her hobbies are sleeping, being outside, and photography.
on March 12, 2014 :
Originally I was going to rate this lower, until I saw the age of the author. Then it is apparent that she is quite talented for her age. I have two suggestions for you Melody... print out your work onto paper and proofread it--do not just rely on spell check. There are a lot of spelling/puntucation mistakes, as well as typos. The other suggestion is to give more details about things. For example, Scotty comes to the store to fill up the tank of the truck where he asks his friend about the job. 1.) Teenaged boys didn't have their own trucks in the 1930s, so if it was a piece of farm equipment, then it is better to say that. Not only does it clarify, but it gives a better mental image. Also, he "filled it up" for $5. A quick internet search said that gas was 25 cents per gallon in the 1920s. So $5 might be a lot, maybe it isnt, depending on the size of the truck, but two days later, he is back at the gas station filling up again. So it must be something that is used reguarly on the farm.
Your story is good, your vocabluary is mature for your age. Your cover is awesome! I cannot photoshop at all, so if you would like for me to proofread/edit your work, I would appreciate work with covers! :) check out my blog or facebook page! And keep writing girl!!! Don't give up, you are on your way to becoming an awesome writer!
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